Misdirected Focus (Poem)

Stepping in to the realm of chaos

Energy rampaging

Blinding my sight

Testing myself

All for what they caused

Enemies lighting the fires of fight

Once united

I fled from love

Her touch reminded me I was still weak

I killed

I cleaned

I stuffed the dove

Mounted it high to climb back to my feet

I made the choice to break free from these chains

Constricting and slowing my body's life force

I found my voice and I'm seeking change

Lifting this weight

Finally shifting my course

For those changing themselves for others

Shifting your focus

But not feeling right

Take back your pride and step out from cover

Lifting up hope and your wings to take flight

Author's Note

I let my obsession (of becoming a tough and bad as I could just for the moment I would meet up with some guys again) ruin everything in my life... I accomplished what I sought out and I have the scars and people that shared some of those crazy memories with me to prove it... But was it worth it? No. I lost focus of my family. My new born daughter. Never let what someone else does or says affect you and just be you no matter what. Never fear.

Reviews

[gatzie]

wow.. just found this... great piece of writing...

[Damien Davison]

Thank you very much!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hi Damien, this is a really great piece that flows well and makes your point so very well. We all get misdirected from time to time but to have insight and to change direction is difficult.

[Damien Davison]

Few actually can stick with the change. I'm still fine tuning but I know I have the strength and courage to rise above... Most do, just finding it is the trick. Thanks for reviewing!

[mark slade]

it's got a great rhythm that's for sure. great job.

[Damien Davison]

I appreciate that thank you.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the obsession brings ephemeral moments of pride, or accomplishment...but in the end we are just left with scars and guilt..

and as you say..loss of friends and family...and we ask..."is it worth it? was it worth it?"

probably not...we can be so influenced by others to think like they do....but what is important are the decisions we make and whether we can go to sleep at night with a peaceful conscience.

strong piece of writing.

jacob

[Damien Davison]

Thank you for taking the time to review and share your thoughts, thank you very much!

[Tarry Franck]

By the way - Author's Note - Great advice!!!!

[Damien Davison]

I'm glad you think so, thank you!

[♪Barklight♪]

that's awsome, and a good messege. no one should ever have to change who they are. it's, well, who they are.

[Damien Davison]

Exactly! Thanks

[♪Barklight♪]

XD

[Tarry Franck]

Very well said! Love this poem! Thanks for sharing :)

[Damien Davison]

Thanks for reviewing!

[Starfruitanimal]

very nice! i like "i killed, i cleaned, i stuffed the dove" and the last two lines are awesome. keep writing

[Damien Davison]

Thank you! I will!

[Kayla Marie]

wow. This is truly amazing!

[Damien Davison]

I appreciate that, thank you!

[Kayla Marie]

no problem! :)

[Southern Cross]

Each day, each moment is a learning experience. Your words show strength and courage to alter one's life and make a difference. To learn from our past and create a future. " Take back your pride and step out from cover
Lifting up hope and your wings to take flight" The ending lines were perfect. They reflect your author's note. Congratulations on finding the truths in your life and facing doubts with courage.

[Damien Davison]

Thank you very much, it took a long time and a lot of bullshit but I've finally found happiness. Not through others either, that's the main thing and the hardest to do. Thank you for the review!