Misdirected Focus (Poem)

Stepping in to the realm of chaos

Energy rampaging

Blinding my sight

Testing myself

All for what they caused

Enemies lighting the fires of fight

Once united

I fled from love

Her touch reminded me I was still weak

I killed

I cleaned

I stuffed the dove

Mounted it high to climb back to my feet

I made the choice to break free from these chains

Constricting and slowing my body's life force

I found my voice and I'm seeking change

Lifting this weight

Finally shifting my course

For those changing themselves for others

Shifting your focus

But not feeling right

Take back your pride and step out from cover

Lifting up hope and your wings to take flight

Author's Note

I let my obsession (of becoming a tough and bad as I could just for the moment I would meet up with some guys again) ruin everything in my life... I accomplished what I sought out and I have the scars and people that shared some of those crazy memories with me to prove it... But was it worth it? No. I lost focus of my family. My new born daughter. Never let what someone else does or says affect you and just be you no matter what. Never fear.

Reviews

[Danielle]

I have to say this is one of my favorites of yours so far...I can relate to this piece a great deal as I have struggled with trying to be happy with who I am as a person and not regretting what I have done in life. I love every word in this poem so excellent work!

[Damien Davison]

I really appreciate the review, thank you. It seems to be an endless battle. But there is an end in sight!

[Sid]

Very nicely written, again this is strong and true, a great motivation for the people who find themselves living a life of someone else's making, maybe after reading your work they can shed that disguise and be who they are and in the process enjoy this great gift...again a great write!

[Damien Davison]

I hope so! Tis my intention. Thank you very much for the review!

[liberty sheldon]

beautiful, and full truth.

[Damien Davison]

Thank you very much! This was a write that felt really good to get off my chest. Thank you!

[liberty sheldon]

your must welcome my friend.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like your poetry. Hard and to the point.
I killed
"I cleaned
I stuffed the dove
Mounted it high to climb back to my feet"
I like the honest direction of the thoughts and the ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Damien Davison]

I always appreciate you reading my work Coyote, thank you for the great review!

[Tai Ryens]

A said obsession can often be as tough to overcome as an addiction. So many emotions run through this here piece, ranging from both anger to regret. Well done!

[Damien Davison]

Thank you for reading this piece! I'm happy you enjoyed it!

[Onyia-Ali, Kingsley Chu..]

I love how you sequentially arrange your thought, is quite obsession. Nicely written.

[Damien Davison]

Thank you, I appreciate another great review!

[Androglossia]

Your deep reflection to the subject made you create an excellent piece. Genius and well thought out.

[Damien Davison]

Why thank you, glad you enjoyed it!

[Jack Reaper]

Great flow and a truely inspiring story. itd be nice if more people could shed the mask of what others want them to be and be who they are. though some are afraid of what may happen from those around them or are simply afraid of themselves. hopefully those people will read your words, and no longer be afraid. great work from you, yet again.

[Damien Davison]

Why thank you Jack, I appreciate the review and motivational comment! I'm glad you appreciate my work!

[Frieda P]

I'm picturing you reading these words in front of a group of people and they're on the edge of their seats waiting in anticipation--love your success in the end.

[Damien Davison]

Heheh, maybe someday I will be able to read poetry in front of crowds... Not to many occupations that allow it, other than musician which is the current goal lol. Thanks!

[Frieda P]

You have a unique sense of the world and it shines through in your writing, you're very welcome.

[DivineButterfly85]

I like the poem, especially the stuffed dove piece...interesting. The note is inspiring...glad you came to your senses make your daughter proud;)

[Damien Davison]

Oh I will! Heh, I'll make sure I'm someone she is proud of! Thanks!