Tears of Time (Poem)

A dark splash

Focus flooding

Lost the time

When is it coming

Life to oblivion

Edge to rock bottom

Mind to it lost

Lucky to 'caught him'

Unfamiliar face

A familiar smile

Eyes to my soul

Our hearts' on trial

Acceptance, please

Forgive my design

Worn and rusted

From tears of time

Author's Note

In the "Lucky to 'caught him'" part, I was selling drugs and I was lucky to have not been caught.

Reviews

[Deron Alexis]

very deep writing love the forgive my design line that just did it for me really this was great

[Damien Davison]

I appreciate it, truly, all the reviews, I'll be returning the favor to all in due time. Thanks again!

[PP]

I can feel through your words. Even if you weren't caught, but guess you were caught with multiple emotions, heart breaks, distrust, so on and so forth of many faces that you knew yet so strange!

I love the honesty you have in your writings Damien:)

[Damien Davison]

That stanza was more of "this is how it will go next time", I know I didn't make it very clear haha.
Life goes back in to oblivion, a realm of chaos kinda deal
If I'm on the edge I'll probably go rock bottom
My mind would be lost after rock bottom
Then my luck would run out. I'd probably get caught next time.
Thank you for reviewing!

[PP]

wow, its different from how I might have interpreted the entire poem!

[Rick Puetter]

Damien,

And interesting and introspective poem. Short poetic lines are a harsh master. You did well with them.

Best regards,

Rick

[Damien Davison]

Thank you very much, I do practice them an awful lot heh. I find the longer ones I catch myself putting filler, To avoid that I practice the small ones. Thanks for reviewing!

[Bound In Red]

Wonderfully done as always. I love getting to read your work.

[Damien Davison]

I'm glad you enjoy my writing, I appreciate all the reads and reviews!

[Bound In Red]

Your welcome.

[Tai Ryens]

I've found this easy to connect with reincarnation. Two halves of a soul; always finding their way to another, but cursed unable to be together. Well done.

[Damien Davison]

Heh, sounds like my relationship with my bay's mother. Thanks for reviewing... I find myself fantasizing about potential past lives sometimes.

[Tai Ryens]

I often find myself fantasizing in general. Whether it be about past lives, future ones, memories, navigating dimensions, and so on.

[Mia]

Your writing never seems like you were writing for the sake of writing.
"Acceptance, please
Forgive my design
Worn and rusted
From tears of time"
WOW!

[Damien Davison]

I appreciate the review. Whenever I find the motivation or that inspiration you get I just go with it and flow with it.

[Jodie Ng]

stay strong, to every dark tunnel there's a light! but this poem is so powerful and personal - great job!

[Damien Davison]

It was pretty much written for my new girlfriend, the last stanza particularly. thank you for reading and reviewing!

[Lily Mae]

I like your way with words.. it feels sharp and direct so I can take in the powerful end of emotion behind the point... Love it..x That last stanza is killer..xo

[Damien Davison]

Why thank you, I try to make most of my work an experience... Some lack but hey... Thank you again!

[K-mo]

I really like this poem, great write!

[Damien Davison]

Thank you for reading!

[K-mo]

your welcome!