Breaking Free (Poem)

Switch off

Alleviate distraction, Dark

I desire your embrace

Pacing the edge

In to the hurricane

Ravaging winds of disgrace

Past has passed

Those ravaging winds

Where do I lay my soul

Rest I will not

For I've too long

One thousand chains I pull

Weakening rust

Defenses exposed

Through miles and miles of torture

Dawning strength

I lift these hands

The earth, she screams in horror

Reviews

[Lily Mae]

What a ride.. awesome write..x

[Damien Davison]

I appreciate the review, thank you.

[Sirius King]

great imagery

great write!

[Damien Davison]

Thanks!

[Sirius King]

np :0)

[Chris Provencher]

Great job, very well written. This is especially meaningful after having read "For you, Baby Girl".

Great work.

[Damien Davison]

Thank you!

[Harley (arbiter)]

Woah. That was amazing. Great job! A exciting trip with a great wording! Very nicely done

[Damien Davison]

Thanks a lot, I appreciate the review!

[victoria]

a wonderful write that takes you on a journey to wits end where I believe at our lowest ebb we are able to find our fiercest strength, with it we act in an instant, where it is soon met in battle by fears, guilt shame wanton desires and more, such are the obstacles to the daily living, acceptance and growth I think comes deepest darkest depths of our heart and soul. I hope like I that you are also rewarded in the simple things. A very relatable, thought provoking read, much enjoyed.

[Damien Davison]

Thank you very much for your contribution, I greatly appreciate the review. In the simple things is all I'm rewarded for now, so aye. Thanks.

[J. J. Nightingale]

HUMM .. HAVEN'T A CLUE AS TO THE MESSAGE HERE .. SORRY ..

JAZZ

[Damien Davison]

Basically the message is, though I've done a lot of wrong and am at the edge of insanity, I find within me the strength to break the shackles of the past, forever in which I dwell, through things such as: my daughter, girlfriend, etc... To move forward. Thank you for reading.

[J. J. Nightingale]

Thank you for the sharing .. :)

[Invisable_Girl]

Rest I will not
For I've too long
One thousand chains I pull

i really love this. great write

[Damien Davison]

Thank you for reading.

[Invisable_Girl]

ur welcome:)

[MachinaWriter]

I kept trying to think of a good way of describing this poem after I read it. I could only think of one word. Evocative. It pulls emotions out of you with powerful imagery. Lines such as "where do I lay my soul", "one thousand chains I pull", "weakening rust" and "the earth, she screams in horror" gave me some pretty clear images. Well done.

[Damien Davison]

Thank you for your review, just one of those ones that flowed out of the pen really.

[MachinaWriter]

I definitely know that feeling. The most powerful ones tend to do that.

[Sami Khalil]

Those ravaging winds
where do I lay my soul.
Nice write.

[Damien Davison]

Thank you.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome.

[Sethnicity]

I'm really digging that fractured style you present here take small phrases to peice together a broken soul .

Favorite verse:
Rest I will not
For I've too long
One thousand chains I pull.

I really feel this line is the strongest
I think you could even take it up a level but increasing the fracture rate.
i.e. http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Sethnicity/1043677/
let me know what you think and if you agree or disagree. eye there way
good poetry.

[Damien Davison]

Thank you, I will check out your writing right away.