Breaking Free (Poem)

Switch off

Alleviate distraction, Dark

I desire your embrace

Pacing the edge

In to the hurricane

Ravaging winds of disgrace

Past has passed

Those ravaging winds

Where do I lay my soul

Rest I will not

For I've too long

One thousand chains I pull

Weakening rust

Defenses exposed

Through miles and miles of torture

Dawning strength

I lift these hands

The earth, she screams in horror

Reviews

[Ruth]

Pleased to meet you love and I enjoyed reading you :)
This is brilliant metaphor and lures the reader to thoughts unleashed!
Excellent!
xox

[Damien Davison]

Thanks a lot!

[Ruth]

Most welcome xox

[Jodie Ng]

This is amazing. The beginning, the very first line gets right to it and the last line is great! starts and ends brilliantly! this is truly fantastic and also very original in my mind!

[Damien Davison]

I really appreciate the support. The reviews and people reading inspire me. Thank you.

[♋ Iris ♋]

This is really amazing. So many emotions. I love the line "Rest I will not For I've too long One thousand chains I pull" Truly amazing. Great write. Keep it up~! :D

[Damien Davison]

Thank you for taking the time to read it. That seems to be 'the' favorite line. I appreciate the review.

[Erin]

I really only have one word: Wow.

[Damien Davison]

Why thank you, I appreciate that.

[Matty Bosox]

Damien, once again I am so enthused and excited to have found a writer of your talent....I have such a huge appetite for amazingly decriptive words and you hit the nail on the head with a fierce power of a Tyson knockout punch...I tell you one thing, Corey Taylor would be very jealous of something as terrorizingly smart and dark....Once again Damien, great job my friend...Keep it up :o)

[Damien Davison]

Very inspirational review my friend, thank you! I've wanted to read your work, finding the time is the struggle in that matter. Anyway that meant a lot, thank you.

[Matty Bosox]

Its my pleasure buddy...Keep up the great writing.

[Rain]

Nice Piece, Damien. Forces the reader to use their imagination. :)

[Damien Davison]

Thank you for taking the time to use yours! Thank you.

[Neville]

Damian, this may well be the first of your poems that I have read. Rest assured, it certainly won't be the last. 'Breaking Free' umh, The earth, she screams in horror...
Great stuff. All Good Things, Neville

[Damien Davison]

i appreciate that Neville, I'll be sure to check out some of your writings as well. Thank you for the review.

[Neville]

Great to hear Damian, All Good Things, Your friend N

[lost girl]

I think the earth screams in horror everyday as she watches us betray our true purposes of enlightenment. It is so hard when we live too much in our natures thrusting ourselves into the dungeons and shackling our thoughts and actions with chains. I always love to read someone being warmed by those rays of light streaming through the barred windows. the burning that feeds the spirit. the intake of solid air ( life) giving the strength to leap into flight to resist temptation and fight for rebirth. love those lines...Rest I will not
For I've too long
One thousand chains I pull

[Damien Davison]

Thank you so much for the review. Love hearing peoples thoughts. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Larry Dyson]

like these thoughts Damien.."


Rest I will not

For I've too long

One thousand chains I pull




Weakening rust

Defenses exposed

Through miles and miles of torture"

the other stanzas either are not developed from your minds eye or I dont understand them...one poets opinion...good ideas though even all the way thru dawning strength I lift these hands...missing the point of the earth screaming in horror...

[Damien Davison]

The earth she screams in horror part: as I broke free from what was binding me too the past, to my insanity, I rise up and basically fly away. I just wanted it to be intense so I made it as if the effort required to break free could cause the earth, personified, pain. The first 3 stanzas: Switch off (I turn off a light), alleviate distraction dark, I desire your embrace (I want no distractions as I sit and dwell) Pacing the edge (of my mind) in to the hurricane, those ravaging winds of disgrace (My past and the pain I've caused others, the things I've done, ravage my mind...) Anyways thank you for reviewing and reading!

[K-mo]

real nice, you have a way of drawing a person in and wanting to know the meaning of each word

[Damien Davison]

Thank you for reading! I'm open to telling anyone the meanings, it adds intensity. Though I also want people to grab from it what they will. Anyways thank you.

[K-mo]

anytime!