Stitches & Scars

On a long flight home from San Diego recently, I plugged in the headphones and listened to Queens of the Stone Age's, "Like Clockwork" and NIN's, "Hesitation Marks". I closed my eyes and visualized..

Stitches & Scars                  March 2014

 

Hypnotized by her mesmerizing gaze

and psychotic smile

Watching the irregular patterns drip

lovely crimson like holy wine

“Taste my love, it’s all for you”, she said

 

Through hazed windows, tortured souls with suicide dreams

wander through these ancient streets, forgiving no one their transgressions

Yet their ignorance betrays them

 

But inside here, the razor burns so good

O, blissful release!

He reflects upon her stitches and scars

His heart cries and his ego thinks

He can save her… But, he can’t save her

 

Through hazed windows, tortured souls with suicide dreams

wander through these ancient streets, staggering into their regression

Moving to rhythmic gothic beat

 

Calling him her dark angel, her saviour

brings her no relief

They raved for days down in the catacombs

That was not deep enough for her,

descending where he could not follow

 

Through hazed windows, tortured souls with suicide dreams

wander through these ancient streets, with eyes wide open and mouths sewn shut

In silent expression of pain

 

Laying together on the cold stone floor

Naked and entwined

With lips stained from the metallic liquid

He stares into her eyes and says,

“Vous etes dans mon coeur et dans ma tete”

 

Through hazed windows, tortured souls with suicide dreams

dance throughout these ancient streets; they’re all bound up with stitches and scars

They’ll renew again tomorrow

Author's Note

You are in my heart and in my head. (translation)

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Even tho the bulk of your message expertly screams "suicide", I had a side-thought while reading about how sometimes in my youth, I noticed people are more attentive when you're desperate, whereas they tend to leave you alone if you're high-functioning. People love a "project" . . . someone to save. This was prompted by your line about thinking we can save, but we can't (((HUGS)))

[I Am Svetlana]

It hurts trying to help someone through such a tough time like this. All you have to do is be there for them...help inspire a change. Help change their perspective. They may feel stuck, but there is always a way out. I've been through this as a personal experience and it was so difficult to make others understand why I did it. I'm over it now, but it took me a long time to realize that it wasnt worth it...

[Damien Thibodeaux]

You are dead on with your analysis! And you are correct, inspiring change in behavior is difficult. All one can do is give support, love and understanding and try to inspire change. Hold them close because this is a deep dark place where they dwell.

[Rachel]

This is a really powerful poem that drags the reader into emotion...It's amazing and sad and it really gets to my heart.
Lovely work.

[Damien Thibodeaux]

Thank you so much Rachel. This poem is very special to me. I am glad it touched your heart.

[AprilRN1210]

this is quite enchanting in a dark twisted magical spell that draws the reader in deeper and deeper... some of the phrasing you used was not only powerful, but brilliant.. and the subtle use of repetition was done perfectly.. it added a layer of intensity and meaning.. I am truly impressed with this piece..

"His heart cries and his ego thinks
He can save her… But, he can’t save her"......

"Calling him her dark angel, her saviour
brings her no relief"................................those lines hit me the hardest.. in life it is easy to think that we can be the answer to someone's prayer, be all that they need to be happy, that we can save someone who is drowning, but sadly, it is not the case.. just because you think you have found the man of your dreams doesn't mean that is reality..

easily going into my favorites.. I thoroughly enjoyed.. :)

[Damien Thibodeaux]

Thank you so much. I am deeply honored by your review. This poem means a lot to me, so it made me very happy that you like it and understood its complexities.

[AprilRN1210]

You're welcome, it was my pleasure.

[Kassandra de Hoyos]

This is probably your inspiration, but this reminded me of the cask of amontillado for some reason.
I guess because it's dark and it knows. It's intentions are bad, but it's charming.

[Damien Thibodeaux]

If it was my inspiration, it was subconscious, so it's an unaware possibility. It's been years since I've read The Cask of Amontillado, though Poe is my personal favorite and I have everything he's written. Thank you so much for visiting and leaving your review. I'm pleased you're familiar with Poe too and I think it's cool you saw similarity between my poem and his.

[Fran Marie]

a tragic yet deliciously dark read...
you have taken us to the underworld of darkness where lost souls dwell

Great PeN!!

[Damien Thibodeaux]

Thank you so much. This one is my favorites. I had high hopes I would be able to put into words the vision that was in my head. Thank you, thank you.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Calling him her dark angel, her saviour
brings her no relief
They raved for days down in the catacombs
That was not deep enough for her,
descending where he could not follow

really amazing lines...i felt this piece, it made the veins on my arms get warm.

[Damien Thibodeaux]

Thank you so much for visiting my page and giving me your thoughts, Jacob. I am pleased and honored by your review.

[Frieda P]

A tortured read, sad, poignant and tragically beautiful. Stunning in its dark essence, muchly enjoyed Damien!

[Damien Thibodeaux]

Thank you so much Frieda. I am honored by your words. It pleases me that I was able to bring this darkness to life. I closed my account for several months and though I've been back a few weeks now, I had to take last week off again. Now I'm ready to be back and renew my friendships. I will be over to visit your page over this weekend, to see what you've been up to. ;-)

[Frieda P]

You sure did, and with much finesse I might add. I've been away too, so I'm in the midst of catching up also...it'll take a bit of time, so no rush. ;-)

[Tina Kline]

This is very impressive work. Beautiful, darkly romantic and tragic. This dark world is spellbinding!!!

[Damien Thibodeaux]

Thank you so much, Tina! I am so glad you like it. Thanks for visiting.

[Tina Kline]

You're very welcome.

[Rita L. Sev]

Damien, you have returned with an amazing piece - visually and emotionally stunning. You open up a dark world, but one where love is not in question...

[Damien Thibodeaux]

Thank you so much, Rita. I wanted to create a dark world. Your review means a lot to me. You are my measuring stick, my thermometer. This lets me know I have succeeded in what I set out to do. Thank you.