LOST

My first attempt at this one was total failure. My brain was scrambled. Thanks to Rita for gently giving me her honest opinion I took it down. I finally got around to re-writing, so here it is.

LOST

As I’ve walked this path

It’s taken me to many places

Now it leads me

Through darkness

 

Searching for something lost

Or maybe something just misplaced

Will I find you?

Can’t find you

 

Looking for a key that unlocks your heart to me

‘Cause I’ve been locked away for far too long

I’m standing underneath your window in the rain

This lost feeling now replaced by pain

And you’re not home

 

As I’ve wandered on

Traveling to anywhere or

 nowhere

To nowhere

 

These days turn into nights

And stars are shining not so brightly

Light my candle

Light my way

 

A star falls every time a lover says goodbye

Seems all these stars come crashing down on me

Regretting all the words we left unspoken

All it’s done tonight is leave me broken

Now I’ve lost you

 

I’ve lost you

Reviews

[Tina Kline]

I can hear the song in this as I read it. There's just about nothing more painful than losing someone you love. You do feel lost, hurt, and broken - heartbroken.

Excellent song/poem.

[Damien Thibodeaux]

Thank you so much, my friend. Heartbreak is something most of us can relate to. It hurts. I'm glad I could successfully capture the feeling. I'm glad you thought my song was good. Thank you so much for reading.

[Tina Kline]

You are most welcome.

[Rita L. Sev]

Damien, I can hear the music in this one. Your words portray strong sentiment, sorrowful and beautiful. Love this.

[Damien Thibodeaux]

Thanks to you, I took my time with this one and got it right this time. I appreciate your reviews so much; both of them.