You Are My Song

To the whisper and the thunder, the moon and its shadow, the moment and the lifetime.

It started with a single note,

A stalled conversation.

A vague consolation.

The moment passed, nothing to hold.

An unsurprising feat.

A single, silent beat.

 

Then upon that note, a chord was built.

A second glance exchanged.

A hope, gently restrained.

Your eyes flicker, then watch me wilt.

An impulse to reach out.

To touch the lilting sound.

 

Verse by verse, the bass drum kicks in.

Sweet laughter and leaning.

Both searching for meaning.

Cue the piano, the violins.

Our unspoken passion.

Both burning for action.

 

Aching as the echoes clash and climb.

Dreaming in ocher.

Moving ever closer.

I long to choose, but is the choice mine?

Fear is compliance.

Love is defiance.

 

What profits a song without a crescendo?

The heavenly wall of sound.

Comes crashing to the ground.

It builds and builds and finally breaks us both.

I have known all along.

That you are my song.

Author's Note

I've always felt there is a strong connection between love and music. This is definitely an illustration of that, and as the title suggests... this, her, us... is my song right now. Let me know what you think ;)

Reviews

[paparapapa]

The whole metaphor was really beautiful. This was well written and your creativity just shined through throughout the whole poem. Each line was captivating. My favorite lines were...

"Fear is compliance.
Love is defiance."

You are an awesome writer. Keep on writing. :)

[Shy Girl]

Its a very elegant song/poem piece. The rhyme is soft and easy..smooth with just a touch of beat to them. Love and music are always a good combination but what makes this one so pretty is that you scored the words with heartfelt simplicity. I think that is one of the hardest things to do in writing. Just the connection between one being and another. This poem has the underline of friend compatability within it also. I enjoyed this very much...soft lyrical carries one away in the words and emotions...thank you for sharing this piece :)

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Brilliantly put! What would love be without music? No love songs maybe. And what would love be without music? Less romantic, no close dancing. You need one to make the other! Crafted perfectly!

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I really enjoyed this write and the metaphor, brillantly and beuatifully done

[Lily Mae]

I love it..love=music and music is love..xo

[Thea]

A very beautifully written poem...You have a really unique style in this piece...Well done... :)))

[Wolfwind]

It is truly difficult to not fall for such a sweet symphony when it speaks to the heart. I enjoyed this piece and it's musical flow. Much Enjoyed!

Aaron

[Ness of Love]

This was all very lovely! I really love how you tied music and love together, great combination!

[R J Askew]

This is great. I like the link you draw and I love the execution. The words tinkle across the page like something from Chopin. It is a joy to read. Some are offish about love and talk about pain, blah. But your poem captures the opposite side of the coin. It's life at its best and your poem captures that. I think the first line is great and for some reason I was taken with 'Dreaming in ochre.'

[ChaoticSoul]

I agree that there is a strong connection between love and music, and you demonstrate that beautifully here. I'm always a fan of metaphors as well, and you create a wonderful one here that can be read on a surface or at something much deeper. Lovely writing as usual!

[Secret Lullaby]

this is realy good :)