withered in the rain

Pretty roses come out in the rain
White clouds gather as the tear drops disdain
Gray beetles agonized drop and drain
Dark wind carries the pink memories and colors them so plain

Cold breeze descending from the sky down to earth
Smothering each breath in the soil of pain
Tears wash the soul but leave it so numb
Agonized and empty inside

O sun the eyes do see thy light
Your glowing heat does reach inside
But a withered leaf in the rain is cast aside

Pretty roses do nourish in the rain
But without the light of the sun
It slowly ashes them to vain  
 

Author's Note

if you felt lost while or after reading, then we're on the same track..

Reviews

[Jack...]

Wonderful, vibrant and beautiful. It is morning here and this, I thank you so much, will be my sunshine for the day, even if it rains. Still you retain that quality in your phrasing, a certain blissfulness follows your every word. The skies may darken and open up, flooding the streets, but with this poem it will always be a sunny spring day in my heart. Thanks you for asking me to read this, it is like a gift to me.

[Dalia]

you have a gift in your kind words Jack.
I appreciate you think so, and I hope it'll shine on me soon as well
thank you, am grateful.

[Jack...]

Very soon it will shine on you and the light will be warm and refreshing. You will know that it is well to smile once again.

[Dalia]

I hope so, wish me luck :)

[Jack...]

Always

[Ahmad Cox]

I can tell you are writing from your soul and I hope your heart finds what it is looking for.

[krish]

Liked this poem. Nicely penned. 100/100.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Magnificent usage of imagery....and the language used is so classy...

each stanza has its own little story, thats how I make sense of it...

great once again :)))

[Dalia]

thank you Yas
glad to see your name and your comment :)

[keyvan]

" It slowly ashes them to vain "...amazing

[Dalia]

thank you.

[David Scott]

I did not feel lost dear poet. I felt like a loss was experienced that would wither the soul. Wonderful telling of pain that even the nourishment will not heal.

[Dalia]

yes, there was a feeling of loss indeed, glad you enjoyed it David, always love to read your reviews :)

[MOON]

Poignant lovely write, imagery great felt all the emotions.

[Dalia]

thank you Moon, glad you liked it dear :)

[Ashley G.]

I thought it symbolized sadness or death then I scroll down and read that you don't understand it either...*surprised* I like that your trying to rhyme but I wish this poem had more...meaning behind it. (I think that was the right word I was looking for.)

[Dalia]

it does symbolize sadness indeed Ashley
I just felt a bit lost with all the feelings while writing, that's why
thank you however I hope my next write will be better

[Ashley G.]

Send me a read request and I'll be sure to read and review! =3

[Dalia]

I will :)

[Chris]

for some the rain is freeing - cleansing... brings joy.
for some it hides the falling tears.
for some - its thought-full.

A rose in ANY place on this earth - is still ...a rose.

[Dalia]

Indeed, rain brings the feeling one hides.
I agree with you Chris, hope you liked it.

[Chris]

I can see the person staring out and into the rain - hell, I could even be that person sometimes.

[Dalia]

rain is a spiritual experience, a bless most of the time, glad you enjoyed it Chris :)

[Chris]

You brought some thoughts with you and left wishes behind...

[Dalia]

mmm I did!
well they are supposed to come together, hope my next poem will bring more wishes

[Lonesome Traveler]

Sometimes some of the best art leaves you feeling lost, and usually makes you want to read/listen/look at it again. I really like reading this, feeling lost in everything and letting the words spin around my mind.

[Dalia]

am glad you could feel what I felt in this poem my friend
thanks for reading and reviewing, appreciate it.

[Purplerose]

Wow! I felt like you were explaining a picture to me. Felt each color drip in sadness. :)

[Dalia]

I had colorful yet sad images in mind, am glad I could convey them to you rose :)