Rise of the devil

Years ago was made a prophecy
That a time will come
A time will come when the Evil will rise
All the Gods will hide behind the clouds
Along with the sun
That keeps the life bright

Surely enough the day came
And the prophecy turned out to be true
The Evil started to rise
And all Hell broke loose…

Chill ran down through earth’s spine
As the Devil walked freely on it
No one could stop him for he himself was the angel of Death

Many were made his slaves
Many went in the graves
His darkness sucked out the pure souls
Lost were all rays of hope

That was when came out the Angel of Life
So beautiful she was that even the Devil went blind
Gods peeked through their hidings
And were mesmerized by the sight
There in front of them was the dance of Fire and Ice

As both the Angels clashed their swords
Lightning covered the sky
Soon the Angel of Death kneeled in front of the Angel of Life...

Author's Note

Please do tell me what you think about it :)

Reviews

[Akshat♥]

I really think it is wonderful write:)
I can totally relate to this..
Rise of devil can took place but it can never defeat Angels :)
You have written this poem with full of emotions...

[Dakshta]

Thanks!! :)

[Akshat♥]

you are welcome :)

[Dakshta]

:)

[Akshat♥]

:P

[Fox]

I love the storyline, it's awesomely made and interesting to follow. Only "but" I would like to point out - mechanics of the text itself. I don't know anything about poem-writing (since I'm not a poet :D), however something caught in my eyes. It was the tempo. I found it hard to read, as a poem. Had to think of a way, how to pronounce it in my head, while reading. Challenging, nevertheless a bit disturbing :). So, -2 points for that, which makes an overall of 98 :D. Still, awesome story, thumbs up for that :).

[Dakshta]

Thanks so much for the review :) And as for the tempo, actually it might be because the words in it does not rhyme much, actually I'm not that good in rhyming but I try :)

[Fox]

Who knows, maybe that's the problem :D. Though, still like it :). Thank you for sharing this with us :).

[Teddy Westley Graham]

Very Interesting.

[Dakshta]

Thanks :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Love the flow of the story, the hiding of the gods in the clouds is a genius twisted turned. I love the details of the ice and fire it is very rich in visuals, I love it, the fighting scence is brilliant. This is an amazing write. thanks for sharing friend. :)

[Dakshta]

Thanks so much Marc! :)