COEXISTENCE

Living with the other

Like light and shade...
     sucked in an eddying universe of mystique,
     dwindled together for the other by Fate,
     are we.

Like right and left...
     paving for the very cause they choose,
     dwindled together for the other by Fate,
     are we.

Like water and fire...
     quenching and burning humanity's thirsts,
     dwindled together for the other by Fate,
     are we.

By Fate, we are each others'
     light and shade,
     right and left,
     water and fire.

Author's Note

Let words drip from our tongues.

Reviews

[Aethereal]

This is a beautiful expression of how one part of Reality defines another part of Reality. Another duality like water and fire would be order and chaos. But for chaos, how would be understand order? But for chaos how would we fall upon order through trial and error serendipity? Plus and minus is another. I liked the ordering of words within your verses.

[The Daisy]

That's grand take on it, Aethereal. Indeed, the other wouldn't exist without the other. Thank you.

[Peter H]

i like the use of antithesis to represent the philosophy of ying and yang if you ask me :) shades of a equlibrium my friend everything must have a means and an end the laws of causality :)

[Nirego]

Really interesting piece with multi-level subtext (to me anyway). I, as the others that have commented really enjoyed this, but personally I would have a slightly different final stanza:

Dwindled together, we are each other's
light and shade,
right and left,
water and fire...

By fate, are we.


Just seems more true to the pattern in my mind and has a stronger climax. I think without the final "by fate, are we" you could leave some people feeling deflated, like an anti-climax having trailed off towards the end and weakening the impact.

[The Daisy]

I love your version of the last stanza. My sincere thanks, Niallgimino. :)

[Nirego]

I'm glad. I think sometimes people are scared to alternative suggestions, particularly on such great pieces, but I believe, whether it's mine or someone else's writing, a different view can make a piece better, or give the writer pause for thought and help them on their journey. We are always learning, after all.

The same goes for your great analyses, too. I, for one, appreciate them. You have a knack for provoking thought!

[The Daisy]

Hi Niallgimino. Thank you.

You're right. Years ago I read this book about writers loathing each other and I can remember myself negating it. I just joined here 3 days ago and I am glued and of course grateful that somehow I have people like you who finally understand this different 'hue' of myself. In return, I will always dole out constructive reviews. Again, thank you.

[Frieda P]

Kismet or circumstance, I like the way you weaved Fate here. Nice one Day's Eye.

[The Daisy]

Kismet...isn't Turkish? Thank you, Frieda P. :)

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Splendid read and write, Day.

[The Daisy]

Thank you. :)

[SyberRose]

I love your form and messages...Nicely penned indeed...Rose

[The Daisy]

Thank you, Rose. :) Means a lot really.

[Dhaye]

Nice presentation of conflict on existence. Though each one is the opposite of the other, one cannot be itself without the other.

Nice piece. Keep it up! Welcome to the group!

[The Daisy]

It's a truth that a lot of people fail to see. Thank you for the invite. :)

[Dhaye]

Sometimes people choose not to see things. It's their choice anyway...
I think yours is a good name...an eye for the day. May you see things you really need. Happy writings!

[The Daisy]

Well I believe that"s when literature takes its part of making people realize what is fitting. Thank you and happy writing, too.

[Dhaye]

Additional info, my friend....other people see but choose not to speak...or act like knowing nothing. But the truth is... they just know how to play the game.

[Sami Khalil]

The duality of it all...A wonderful write full of so much truth...Well penned...:)

[The Daisy]

Wow, thank you. :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome ....:)

[Baby Ricochet]

Good job. Write some more.

[The Daisy]

Thank you and yes, I will write more. ;)