oh! This is so sad. These days addiction to drugs, cigarettes, alcohol and premature sex is not at all a rare happening in schools..And you've given a very good message to everyone!
"Time past on
Bad company was more solitary now"- This is really a great way of ending any write like this..
Also, this piece reminded me of my own school days :P :P
oh! This is so sad. These days addiction to drugs, cigarettes, alcohol and premature sex is not at all a rare happening in schools..And you've given a very good message to everyone!
"Time past on
Bad company was more solitary now"- This is really a great way of ending any write like this..
Also, this piece reminded me of my own school days :P :P
What is real? Does it matter what is real? We believe what we chose to believe. But then solitary comes as a nasty slap. I like the way the bag 'fell into our hands' naughty, naughty bag!
This is a really creative piece. I love the way it was written almost in dialogue & through the chaotic minds of those troublesome teens. :P I liked the ending too, and how it reflects the idea that crime can only be entertaining for so long. (: Great job!
Posted 16 Years Ago
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This is good! I think you have captured the essence of teenagers who get into trouble! Great poem!
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