Fateful day or Unfateful

Whether to Believe on inner concise or not

A long peaceful day, a girl named Mishel was walking enthusiastically towards a long big dark tunnel which lead to her college Oak Land Girls College as that day was her 1st day. Suddenly, a strange man came and asked her which direction was she going. That guy was tall and handsome with great moustache. The moment she saw him she got mesmerised but suddenly she had feeling that something wrong was going o happen. She was surprised with her such feeling but she started conversation with him unknown to the fact that she was going to different direction of tunnel. 

After few minutes, when she realised that she was in some strange place she saw that the guy to whom she was having chat had suddenly disappeared. She was baffled and started searching him around that place which looked like old village but it was seeming like no man's land. Her inner concise was saying repeatedly to run away from that place as that place was not giving good intuition to her but she thought as she had came their with that man she should leave this place with him as she felt she would be responsible for anything if happend to him as she was enacting as she was know to that route whereas she was not. Suddenly, she saw a marvelous and extravagant palce.

She felt that she might be going to caught into some pre planned trap but she thought she might be thinking uselessly and went over there thinking that the person with whom she came may had gone there. 

The moment she stood in front of the door suddenly the door opened. There was sudden silence just as the same silence before a thunderstorm and high pitch darkness just as night at new moon day. She looked back thinking of what she should do suddenly she saw the all the villages had disappeared and there was deserted area. After that suddenly a hand came patting her back with meager voice asking whether she was a visitor to her cottage. She looked back with anger and fear for asking how come that person can call a palace a cottage but her eyes gets wider when she saw that behind her was a old lady and the palace in front of which she was standing a moment had disappeared and there was actually cottage of hers.

Holding her fear and anger she asked her which place she was. That lady told her that was standing in front of door of hell. She was confused and asked her how she came to the door of hell as she never done any activity and she was alive how can she say she was standing in front of hell.

Suddenly, that old lady turned into evil vampire and told her that her life is hers and she can not go back ever to her place where she was.

Those words suddenly shook her ground.

Suddenly, everything got rewind in front of her eyes from the moment she met that strange man. The moment she changed the direction, at that point he leaned towards her saying that he had seen something suspicious around her neck and then everything went blank.

Reviews

[matrixmark]

Prety neat little piece, a few grammar errors but nothing to serious. You could be a bit more descriptive with the evil empire and the tall man with the moustache as i feel it would bring so much more to the table to accompany a good decent little story.

Mark.