Anatomy Of Wordplay

Words have bones ...

To cast a fairytale spell

is to say make-believe

or resurrection

is to squeeze a grape

to transform it

 

To say the sun’s age

is to talk full-circle

an aperture opening

closing

light caught on glass

 

There is mystical thunder

aligned with magic

If casting doubt instead of spells

imagination is at risk

You must stop here, read no further

 

because fairytales

have drawbacks

like finely tuned characters

exploiting violence

as amusement

 

To say immediately is to say

now

is to see stones pulled

from the air

is to say the more one inhales 

 

the harder anxiety grips  

is to know

seclusion is exclusion

is to understand never-ending

renders dubious riddles

 

To say depleted is to say

finished

collapsed

is to reply

I must get up

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I love the way you connect these idea pops in a mesmerizing stream. Reading this makes me want to try something in a similar vein. I love the way this feels random but is full of well-thought-out ideas. I also notice the intensity of the delivery seem to vary here & there (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[DAH]

This is one of those writes that came so fast and effortlessly that I was sure that I had conjured it from the air. When we trustingly wave our word-wands all thoughts and every thought will appear on the page. We must trust ourselves, I mean, really trust ourselves as the guides of our spirits, trust ourselves for leading us to our catharsis.

Thank you, barelygirl!

DAH

[Einstein Noodle]

wow! love the magic weave ... the grounded word play is very very smart says i! philosophical thought deep seated right there in between ;) so glad we have met .. I read you impressive bio and honestly... in just this first read .. i have to say it shows .. great stuff here ... thanks for sharing and hanging out at the Cafe'
E.

[DAH]

I'm happy to read this kind and lovely critique.

Thank you E.N. for feeling this one, for getting it.

Yes, the Cafe is a fine spot!

DAH

[Cherrie Palmer]

We never get to old for a good fairytale. Magical mysteries that stir the imagination.

[DAH]

Thank you.

[Ted Kniffen]

To say this is exquisite is to put a word to it that may not live up to the lines. This plumbs the depths of mysticism...magic...and all that fairy tales bring to the imagination.
"If casting doubt instead of spells
imagination is at risk"

But we have the Brothers Grimm to thank for wicked terror and witches.

A delightfully mysterious bit of writing.

[DAH]

I've been fortunate to visit one of the mansions in Southern Germany that the Grimm's used to write some of their tales. A watchtower room overlooking a dark pond near the Black Forest. The water was black. The entire scene, eerie and fascinating all at once.

Thank you, Ted, for this striking critique that is spot on.

Cheers!

[Robert Trakofler]

the palate of perception is a panoply of structure in the placement of words a transcendence of symbology changes the define in the lines and yours rings a familiar tone

[DAH]

Robert, Thank you for this fine critique, and for the intricate wordplay you have left here.

I'm honored.

[Robert Trakofler]

just sorry i haven't read you before

[DAH]

Robert,

Here we are at the Cafe, in good company.
Let the readings begin and continue ...

I like my coffee dark roast, strong and black.

I like my Sativa pungent and dreamy, expansive and crystal clear.

I'm happy to be here with you!

[Robert Trakofler]

crap there goes my false sense of Solipsism could it be another exists

[DAH]

ha ha ! love it!