Love and time - Give and take - an alternate vow

(Spoken ... as if behind a pulpit)

 

What can be taken can be given

One to another, equal measure

It maintains equilibrium

And builds a treasure

Of trust and security

Of faith and honesty

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 (song begins)

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Time given and taken

It's a two-way street

For two, not forsaken

In the middle they meet

 

Give and keep

Another concept

Promises are only as good

As if given they are kept

 

My time is yours

This promise I can make

As long as you respect

My time that you take

 

Take my time

And I'll take it too

Cherish the promise

I give to you

 

Give time back

It just shows you care

I've seen your stack

Won't take more than's there

 

If my time you waste

And my promise is neglected

I'll lose my faith

Having felt rejected

 

Time ... take all you need

I'll give all I've got and

When you give back to me

I won't feel forgotten

 

Sand flows down in an hourglass

Runs out as it fills top to bottom, then

The time it measures only lasts

If the glass is turned over again

 

So turns we must take and give

With the time we have for each other

Never to forsake as long as we live

Each other for another

 

There's another word for time

You can replace each instance above

And repeat this song line for line

That word is ... love

 

(So the glass is turned over .... and now the song goes)

 

Love given and taken

It's a two-way street

For two, not forsaken

In the middle they meet

 

Give and keep

Another concept

Promises are only as good

As if given they are kept

 

My love is yours

This promise I can make

As long as you respect

My love that you take

 

Take my love

And I'll take yours too

Cherish the promise

I give to you

 

Give love back

It just shows you care

I've seen your stack

Won't take more than's there

 

If my love you waste

And my promise is neglected

I'll lose my faith

Having felt rejected

 

Love ... take all you need

I'll give all I've got and

When you give back to me

I won't feel forgotten

 

Sand flows down in an hourglass

Runs out as it fills top to bottom, then

The love it measures only lasts

If the glass is turned over again

 

So turns we must take and give

With the love we have for each other

Never to forsake as long as we live

Each other for another

 

There's another word for love

You can reword the rhyme

And repeat the song above

That word is ... time

Author's Note

Espressivo andante .... expressive ... moderate. Begins with singular acoustic guitar, adding mandolin ... building .... violins and orchestration ....

Will this be your wedding song?

Reviews

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Could possibly be . . . although I do believe that love given, should not be "expected" in return.

Wanted, yes . . . most definitely. Expected in return; only we could possibly hope for.

A side of you, I truly enjoy. Very romantic and straight from the heart.

Truth, in all it's bittersweet glory.

[Dani California]

This is lovely Jay!
You really worked this one!
Definitely hones in on the
give and take of a relationship...
compromise. :)))

Sometimes I think we
overthink everything. Instead
of just going with it, we develop
expectations. And that's where
things get muddled...

It really is a lovely piece my dear friend,
and it flows beautfully as well...!

Excellent work Jay!

[Passion for Literature]

Oooohhhhh, I like this one...I really like the image of the hourglass you stick in there...I like how you weave time and love together...you address the aspects of give and take...the consequences of respecting or neglecting the concept of promises is a very nice message to convey.

the first stanza (before your song begins)....VERY EFFECTIVE THOUGHT...you start off in the positive realm concerning your message to follow which offers the reader a nice ambiance...I like the mood you design with your insight and intuition.

VERY WELL WRITTEN...

[HoorayForUnderdog]

Very nice sentiment, Dagonut...very creative also!

[Ray Hamilton]

Well this I liked, the give and take of a relationship
It will work if both are givers and honest with each other

With the heart I say there's always time and space for a new love
Thanks for sharing Ray { Not a Poet }

[Wildfleour]

And what is the rhythm behind this song, my friend? I hear a slow song on this one.