Hello Alone

Hello alone

where have you been

I wonder if you would go back to your sin

I'll be a child

no mother wild

go lay down your case and I'll burn up the file

your daddy says

you have to obey

cause if you don't you gonna have to pay

you're his little child

and I am wild

to pick up your case and I will burn up your file

I will burn up your file

cause All i ever said to you

came from my mind and my heart

my mind and heart (x3)

it's friday night

i picked up a fight

and now i have to fight for my right

I fight for you

and mother too

i raise my hand, I only raise it for you

and all I ever said to you

yeah all I ever said to you

came from my mind and my heart

my mind and heart (x3)

Reviews

[Color of the Iris]

Wow, again, you're using breath-taking and heart-wrenching and combining them together to create one toxic poem that poisons the reader as he/she becomes captivated slowly... leading them to their numb demise.

Awesomeness, as always... I leave it to you, the poetic magician to lull me into your spell again. :) 100/100

[OT]

nice strong emotions!! I have to agree, would be nice if you played a little more on the inner ear!! but that's pretty damn hard to do - so as a poem more than a song it's great!! and as a song I can only imagine it's pretty great too!!

[MiidniightSoul]

Amazing. Such emotional and heart wrenching song lyrics. Beautiful written and I can imagine the guitar playing in the background. Amazing.

[absolutefolie]

Great song! Good job :)

[FallenHeroXx]

THis is good.

Fallen

[thatscenechikkmarie(:]

Great song.! you can really pull the message out of this, "came from my mind and my heart". overall great!(:

[E.H. Monroe]

The messsage is harsh, defiant.
Is missing the music. Lyrically, the refrains (for me...and I'm a quarter retarded) and the time counts take me out of the poem itself. Don't change the lyrics, but possibly let us HEAR (through onomaopoeia of some equally as hard to spell literay device) the music.

Make sense?

[how.girls.get.clean]

wow....this is really really good. i like the emotion and details :)