too drunk to dance

This is the first song I wrote for my band Crowbar Suicide. It's about how fucked up the youth is nowadays. Parties are drowning in drugs and strong liquor and that's a problem for many teenagers.

what's that going trough my head/every night and day?

I think I'm too drunk to dance/but I'll kiss you anyway

i found a girl in your bed/now she belongs to me

what's what do she belong to you/I'll keep her anyway

no matter what you say

no matter what you do

I'll pierce from her inside

WITH MY LANCE

I've found these pills on your disc/can i plz swallow them now

I also found this big shiny neel/I just don't know how

i just ate a mushroom/now I'm all woow

look at that giant turtle/and the big blue cow

no matter what you say

no matter what you do

I'll pierce from her inside

WITH MY LANCE

Reviews

[Kayleen]

The first bit is amazing, but ill be completely honest the chorus section takes away all of the magic in the first verse. the last 2 lines are a bit childish. i like the second verse as well, up until "I'm all woow" when it gets silly again. (is that supposed to be Needle, btw? because i really like that line) but i think this piece has A LOT of potential if you work it a little more. it could be a really powerful read.

[deeps]

This was wonderful, Love the flow of this.

[taylor young]

that was great XD

[FallenHeroXx]

Like it :P

Fallen Hero

[Color of the Iris]

Wow, ha ha ha ha, someone had fun... lol