Smile

The first thing I noticed was his smile, his sweet, gentle smile. His red, curly hair mirrored the fire in his heart, and his big green eyes look straight into me. 

His stare reaches through my chest and pulls at my heart, it holds a firm grip. It spreads to my lungs, and its so tight i cant breath, its too tight, and breaths become gasps and I become lightheaded.

Realization comes with pain, I'm in love with this boy. It's not fair to call him a boy anymore, almost a man, he towers over me, his arms surround me, they pick me up and twirl me around and my feet float in the air around us. 

I didn't allow myself to feel, my heart closed, not letting the moment in and not letting the cries out. I had to look away, his happiness burned my eyes, made them weak and senseless. How could he be so happy? I held back the words, those i had longed to say, the ones that would explain why I did what I did. I hope that one day he'll understand, and he"ll listen, forgive that I broke our close bond in order to spare my feelings, and that I was angry, because he didn't come after me.

Reviews

[xSummer'sPatient]

Really fantastic descriptions here. I mean, it really gives you a sense for what the girl is feeling. The ending kind of came out of nowhere though. It's still good overall, but it's like, Oh I feel great! and then Oh damn, nevermind... What happened, exactly? But most questions are answered by the end, so that's okay. Still, great job.

[Leo]

Very emotional and sensual. Lovely story! :))

[Pink Butterfly]

I really miss that teenage love... This is cute. Thanks for sharing!
God bless you! =)

[J Todd Underhill]

This is the first I have read from you and I enjoyed it. Descriptive and emotive all in one!

[Jaded Mermaid]

Passionate and inscriptive. Beneficial, gripping, and insightful to the writer's soul.

[xXViciousTeddyXx]

Great! Fantastic use of the senses.

[LochnezzMonster]

Oh the details! *swoon* I looove it. this is so great, mid way I was hoping you could make this a preview to a future. book. it's sooo good, maybe you should. But I don't know if your into the book this.

There some un answered questions I have about the end. But i'm guessing you intend to leave the reader guessing...?? I don't know. But this was a great read and expressed alot to the reader.

- Bobbie