stolen moments

All this talk of beaches

and oceans

and walks in the sand

leads me to dreaming

as I lay

on this blanket

in my tiny patch of grass

behind the garage

away from peering eyes

 

The traffic

in the background

sounds like waves

gently rolling

to the shore

as the sun shines

through the clouds

and I am filled

with peace

 

 

and as I lay here

I can wonder

at the beauty

in my mind

instead of the sight

that someone unknown

has come along

and  clipped the tiger lilies

from my  garden

Reviews

[ganymeder]

I love this.

I like the idea that you can be anywhere and be at the beach if only you imagine it.

I also like the fact you are trying to ignore that someone trespassed and clipped your lilies.

Nicely done.

[Adrian K. Smith]

I laughed, and I kind of needed that laugh... :)

I enjoyed the twist, much as I enjoyed the thoughts of the beach.

[Chaos]

I love the imagination in this peace. It just goes to show you, that you can be in a garage, at work, waiting in line at the supermarket, doing laundry or dishes and still be caressed by the warm air on a summer day as the coolness of the water from the ocean tickles your toes. It's up to you! I loved it.

[LSS]

This is one of your better poems, to me. It flows smoothly and rhythmically. I was immediately drawn into the setting and soon lying on the blanket. What you saw and described were personally felt. I enjoyed it.
Lar

[Lori]

I love how there is this sense of danger in your suburban yard when the narrator has found such a peaceful place in her mind. The symbolism of the trespassing and the flowers being clipped is very vivid, as the narrator is relaxing in her reverie. While it can stand alone as a personal poem, it also can be blown up to mean more. This encroachment on our personal space/rights, as we stand by oblivious.

[holly]

You did such a fine build-up to the anti-climatic point of the poem, delivered wryly in the last 5 lines. I liked this for its irony as well as for its clear setting of place and its descriptions. You "speak" well with your tongue in your cheek.

[Dee Lacy]

Good read. I enjoyed it. Dee

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

A lovely poem. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Omar]

this is lovely. so vivid and peaceful. I always handled such subjects in my poetry, it's so beautiful to daydream, to lose yourself somewhere unknown, where you can be safe, untouched, at peace. In one of those 'stolen' moments, which seem to be undefined, almost non-existent.
great work,
O

[Ray Hamilton]

It's always nice to sneak away someplace to relax
I enjoyed your write
Thanks for sharing
Ray