Carnivorous

Fragments, slivers, snippets, scraps
How many of them have I consumed of you.
How many do I have to
For you to think me all knowing

I can pick you out of my teeth at night
And still taste the hints of your mystery by morning
Suffer the indigestion of your reluctance
Yet savor the reminders

I have broken teeth on your bones
Stretched my stomach to your shape
Split my lips on your sharpened edges
Singed my tongue on your secrets

How much have I consumed of you
How much do I have to
How much will you give me
To feel that I have had my fill

Reviews

[Re-Pete]

ouch or should i say burp. when enough is enough. not easy to digest. burger king has nothing on this. well said ... :)

[Brad Dehler]

Very good analogy of relationship and being deeply invested. The title pulls one in, I like this very much, great concept and well played. Hopefully your indigestion has been resolved :)

[Lathen Griffiths]

Being a vegetarian I felt I ought to read this piece :) and I have to say it wasn’t at all what I thought it might be (in a good way) I really sensed a balancing out of emotions here, a sort of yin and yang, very original.

[Sarah Jane]

Thank you for popping in! I am glad you liked this despite not eating meat yourself :) I appreciate you're time!

[Akshay Rawal]

This is a nice and entertaining read, some well-written lines which makes the reader convinced that the carnivorous thinks the same way as mentioned here. It also kind of shows that the carnivorous predator is bored now and has just become self aware and mindful of the food chain. Also elicits that the predator does not hate the prey, but only feeds on them by nature's design.

I usually find it hard getting hooked to free verse because not many people pull free verse off really well. Getting hooked to the narrative is what I crave for, which all poems can't deliver. This is some of the finest free verse I have read in a while. Thanks for sharing.

[barleygirl]

If you'll allow me this tangent, I noticed when I hover (mouse) over your name, I see your filename starts with DOTARD (describes me: an old person, especially one who has become physically weak or whose mental faculties have declined). Now I'm wondering about you . . .

About your poem, this is awesome sparkling writing! I think the idea of "carnivorous" has been written about many times, but never so fresh & popping as this. The first 3 lines of V2 are some of the best lines I've read in 2020. I just want to scream with the desire to write something as punchy as that! I love the way you straddle between a tone of utter disgust for this "other" person, yet also it's evident there's still a ton of affection & desire stuck in this narrator's craw. Here's hoping you & yours are all doing well (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Sarah Jane]

What are you wondering? And thank you! I came up with this one in frustration while driving. Instead of disgust, I tried to portray that I have put up with much unpleasentires during our relationship and always up come back for seconds regardless, due mostly to the desire and love that you read.

[barleygirl]

Your photo would suggest you're the opposite of a DOTARD . . .

[Sarah Jane]

Truthfully, I made the username up when I was about 12 trying to sign up for some popular website or another. I had no idea it was an actual word until about a year ago when my husband asked me about it. I just needed a unique username and thought I was being original but originality isnt what it used to be.

[barleygirl]

This is a great story. It reminds me of how Bad Bunny came up with his handle . . . he was on a gaming site where everyone had bad-a*s names, so he was trying to come up with a name that was as far from bad-a*s as possible! I wish I'd been so creative once in my life!

[Coyote Poetry]

Carnivorous, less today than 20 years ago. Meat, hard to digest and only good in small portions. In the USA, we are carnivorous. Never enough for some people. Powerful statements, made the reader think and ponder dear Sarah. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote