An Undecided Ugly

Risen from my warm water bath

I stood bare in my bathroom

Wiping the beads off my mirror

While choking on musk perfume

I first noticed my unruly hair

Flailing this way and that

Then my breasts and n*****s

Stiff to the chill, but still flat

My gaze settled on my stomach

Lumpy and sucked in tight

Then down to my curvy hips

Spread too far for most to fit right

I finally take in the tiny lines

The scars that cover here and there

A time line they've become

They are the story I wear

I find them beautifully forbidden

I find them lovely and sweet

They are the holders of my memories

They are the truth in me

When I'm dressed I am ugly

When I'm naked, I'm undecided

Reviews

[ChemicalMadness]

This was starkly beautiful and so innocently honest. There is so much packed into this piece, but it really all comes back to the honesty for me. Lovely.

CM

[zainul]

Awesome!

[Yellow Butterfly]

This is a very deep poem about ones self worth and self esteem....

I find them beautifully forbidden
I find them lovely and sweet
They are the holders of my memories
They are the truth in me

Written by a blossoming beauty.... :O)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

if i did favorites...this would be one.

plath pretty much said that we worry way too much about physical perfection...but really what's inside counts so much more.

and to me, perfect isn't sexy, it is plain...
character happens when there are flaws...

i need to move on to another poem...but can't seem to get away from this one.

[Sarah Jane]

Plath is my FAVORITE poet. Thank you for your review:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i see plath's "Mirror"---

close, but what a great ending too...bare naked with all the imperfections..that is really sexy--

clothed ugh...but naked..undecided...very cool poem.

beautiful phrasings.

[Mariah Jane]

Wow... I can really relate to this. As a wife, and mother, I often do this, in fact. Stand there, trying to decide how I feel about the scars on my stomach... how I feel about how I have changed and become ugly when I am dressed... and yet, when I am naked, I truly am undecided.
This has been beautiful written and carries so much thought and emotion. Thank you for finding a way to put it into words. It was very very well written. Keep it up!

[Antonio Valentino]

I finally take in the tiny lines

The scars that cover here and there

A time line they've become

They are the story I wear




I find them beautifully forbidden

I find them lovely and sweet

They are the holders of my memories

They are the truth in me




When I'm dressed I am ugly
When I'm naked, I'm undecided


Sarah.. that is enormously brilliant

especially: they are the story that i wear, and, they are the truth in me

wow..

"When I'm dressed I am ugly
When I'm naked, I'm undecided"

life is often undecided.. but it is better than masking the truth

what a terrific write

:)

[Sarah Jane]

Wow, thank you:) you;re so kind

[Antonio Valentino]

that one was timeless Sarah.. you done good :)

[Bella]

Beautiful... absolutely beautiful