Scratching an Itch!

Snippets, in 3 lines ...

Why strain to get rich?

When simple pleasures are best,

like scratching an itch.

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In traditional Senryu/Haiku format

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Or try the old switch,

An itch in time saves you nine,

and suppress that twitch.

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... t'which will it be?

:)

Reviews

[Martiya Daman]

Your poem is saying that it’s better to enjoy little things, like scratching an itch, instead of always trying to get rich or worry too much. It’s reminding us that sometimes the small, simple things make us happiest, Dylan! And you can't forget about trying to balance the switch light, we all have done that :)

[Dylan Macadham]

You understood what I was saying exactly my friend! Thanks😊

[Martiya Daman]

*Senryu ;)

[Dylan Macadham]

... Happy Senryu to U 2 ! :)

[Martiya Daman]

Heh? Who' I thunkit :)

[Dylan Macadham]

...you're funny!🤣

[destiny renteria]

very wonderful and sweet
I love how you put the structure together in it
it is so lovely and productive

[Dylan Macadham]

Gracias Destiny! A Review to treasure :)

[A.H.]

this is super fun read. I liked it really, Dylan. very clever writing. claps!
in those lines, you have imparted a wealth of knowledge. simple pleasures are the best, so true. why run behind and chase the rich, when you have so much to enrich, simple little everyday things to savor. And, second part turns the poem on it's head, questioning - how about going the way of taking care of little problems as well before they turn big and explode on our face. awesome piece.

[Dylan Macadham]

Thanks so much AH for a great Review and a most thoughtful analysis! :)

[A.H.]

you're most welcome, Dylan.

[JessyJacob]

Hi Dylan,

Happy valentines day.
Looks b*****s are enjoying enough with nude dresses and drinks with munching of beef pieces. You hav fed enough.
I think you are busy singing in a corner morning gone, raven hot. Content with life. What do you think ?
Few people are suffering with our own suffering when are you going to celebrate with them. You think those b*****s are more pleasure giving to you than your mom and wife
She needs a father you need one mom with out caring your own mom.
When people are having sexy bitchy erotic mom and fat a*s husband why they are greedy at few more fatty dickz .

Man how come you are becoming so sicck... already getting old then why do you need sexy sweet b***h 15 yrs girl..??

Think it about it.

Finish it out
How much we will suffer??

Your own people are washing hNds by throwing into hounds your flesh

Remember your mom is chanting your name your wife is praying for you
.cut the asses out who are pissing on us
.
Jessy Jacob ..

[Soren]

I'll scratch that itch before it begins a scratch before an itch always wins. A most fun read. Loved it.

[Dylan Macadham]

haha, wish I'd written your rhyme, Bravo!
Thanks Soren! :)