Memories Passed

We strode along the shore;

Sharing, Plotting, Laughing.

I swam in unfamiliar fervor;

A girl with fledgling desires.

 

We stayed up late at night;

Worrying, Tearing, Comforting.

I slept wrapped in confusion;

A girl beside her confidant.

 

We hid under picnic tables;

Whispering, Smirking, Falling.

I evaded that seductive fruit;

A girl clinging to innocence.

 

We said farewell in summer;

Forsaking, Consoling, Embracing.

I mutely perished that season;

A girl longing to blossom.

Reviews

[Ivory]

This style is not always written well, but this piece was very good and I enjoyed the creativity.

[DL Shackleford]

Thank you. My pieces chose their own, sometimes I can work with that and at times I can not.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I quite enjoyed this one. There is a definite and deliberate style to this, which follows a format that I am usually not all that keen on, but in this particular piece I think you have done it justice. I love the imagery, and the emotional balance that seems to build and grow throughout the piece to a final culmination. Well done.

[DL Shackleford]

Thanks. I try to write in the style that the piece initially starts to come to me. This leads to a lot of experimenting :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

That's the best way to do it

[Avocations of Amber]

I love the style you used here. It had a child-like candor to it....sweet-natured. The essence of days gone by, those happy moments of pure elation. Nicely captured.... welcome to the WC! :)

[DL Shackleford]

Thank you.

[Lee Rhodes]

This was very beautiful. I love the style you use and I'd like to read more of your work.

[DL Shackleford]

Thanks. I would love it for you to read more- especially if you like it :)

[Mjay55]

I enjoyed this piece. It made me think about what you were saying and the experience you might have had.

[DL Shackleford]

Thanks for the review. Young love is both sweet and painful as it awakens.