The Monster in My Closet

Oh the things that kids think of.

Sleeping in bed,

This child does not hear

Of the blows to the head,

Of his parents most dear.

 

Dreaming of schemes,

His parents now out.

Never again their screams

To, “Eat your sauerkraut!”

 

Squishing a roach,

He rolls next to Bear.

A demon’s approach

Companioned with a glare.

 

With a loud thud,

The boy is awake,

To behold his bud

Holding a bloody rake.

 

“Did you smash them?”

Wonders the lil’ boy.

“I just cut out their stems,”

Replies the monstrous Roy.

 

Monster lies down,

Tossing aside Bear,

The lil’ boy rolls around

A demon pets his hair.

 

Reviews

[HoWiE]

Heheh cool - nice job. Like the guys say below me, nice little twist - it just goes to highlight the dangerous little things that lurk in the minds of our children. Luckily as writers most of us get to keep these dangerous little thoughts...

Good job! Cheers mate - HoWiE ;-)

[Blackbirdsong]

This is a nice little creepy piece to read and I love how you gave it a twist at the end. I wasn't expecting that at all :)

[Gary H]

Liked the way this bounced around despite the tale being dark and foreboding. I can see where you are coming from re: the style and think you have done an excellent job.

Great work.

[Amanda Crandall]

mother goose meets Silent Hill, Nice.

[Phillip J Clayton]

awessomness love the ending alot! but very cool pome over all...

cheers!

[MistyJRose]

Pretty good. Great read. and i loved the way it rhymed. :)

[Drifter]

lol this was awesome! Good job!

[Pauline Ramsey]

LOL, I loved it!

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

ohh man, knucklehead doesn't get it, but much luck in the contest! mishy

[Fantasyfairy]

I like the twist in this, that was one I didn't see coming, and I am usually pretty good at looking to see what is coming next. Nicely written too, great job hun XX