Lost

Sometimes I sit and wonder
I can't help but ponder
When did you stop loving me?
When will you ever set me free?
Our love is broken that it obvious
But we still live day to day with no love in us
Our love had never been easy
Especially at times when you were sleazy
Erotic and strong
The fire in me will burn on
Weather it's with you or for the next person I meet on my journey
Ten years and I've never felt so Lonley
My path in this life still has lesions to learn
But it's your love I yearn
Even with a fire in my heart burning
Knots in my stomach turning
Give me the strength to go on
Use the energy from my song
For if I cannot be fixed
I'll be lost in the mist.

Reviews

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A very relatable poem, DDee.

When the fire of love fizzles out we do find ourselves lost and yearning for it to return again soon. It leaves us alone, feeling helpless and wondering just what went wrong.
Small note: edit for "is", "whether", "lonely", "lessons". Typos.

A lovely, innocently ponderous poem. Nice work.

[Franky]

I think this needs a rewrite. Sorry. I don't mean to be negative. I just think sitting down and rewriting it would add a lot to the meaning here. It doesnt flow like your others.

[Mohamed Rahim Iqbal]

What a feel. It's making me feeling my love.
Awesome lines.... Each lines are making feeling.

It's really good to read. Keep working. All the very best for your work.

[Mohamed Rahim Iqbal]

Welcome. DD

[AcasualPawn]

Lost youth in emotional love............
Thats become trend now.......


Nice work keep it up