'Bluegreen'
D Connolly,
Oh this one really clicks with me! Your title choice is perfect and water colors have a calming effect, a sit and ponder effect. It is lovely to be taken along with you on this time of reflection and even what sounds like some healing. Natural places like this are so important for we people. Bless you so much. I really appreciated this lovely piece!
Kathy
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Thank-you so much Kathy, I'm glad you were able to relate to this
'Bluegreen'
D Connolly,
Oh this one really clicks with me! Your title choice is perfect and water colors have a calming effect, a sit and ponder effect. It is lovely to be taken along with you on this time of reflection and even what sounds like some healing. Natural places like this are so important for we people. Bless you so much. I really appreciated this lovely piece!
Kathy
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
Thank-you so much Kathy, I'm glad you were able to relate to this
This idea of "bluegreen" being personified is brilliantly done . . . it could be your water place, but it could be any outdoor place with green leaves & blue sky. I love the sensual descriptions of how this peaceful place feels & heals. The last two lines are very original & dynamic -- I can just feel oneself being itchy to get going again, after such a reprieve from the hassles of life!
The waves dashing and taking away the sorrows and giving an insight into life each day. What lovely would it be to live by the sea, that it a teacher, a friend and guide. I was swept away by your word play.
Yes I can see the return and understand the wish to. And feel the serenity of the waves. That is the colour of the water in my favourite place on earth. A place called Luskyntyre on the Island of Harris in the Outer Hebrides.
I had to look that place up really fast, you're right, it is beautiful! I'm down south on one of the.. read moreI had to look that place up really fast, you're right, it is beautiful! I'm down south on one of the northern Florida keys (not Key West), so we get this wonderful warm water almost all year long! It's a great place to center myself
8 Years Ago
The music of the waters does really lift the soul doesn't it? And you have done a perfect job of put.. read moreThe music of the waters does really lift the soul doesn't it? And you have done a perfect job of putting that across here.
8 Years Ago
Except the water in the Hebrides is not very warm.
I think you're going in a good direction with this. The piece gets stronger as you go along - the ending is the best part. "And itchy with new skin" is my favorite line, but I feel like you could do without "Reborn." Also wondering about "Purifying my lungs with your salty caress" because wouldn't inhaling seawater lead to drowning? Just a little muddy with the imagery, but like I said, the ending is strong.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Thank-you for reading. I wasn't actually talking about inhaling the water, but the smell of the ocea.. read moreThank-you for reading. I wasn't actually talking about inhaling the water, but the smell of the ocean is salty; there's nothing else like that smell. I appreciate your thoughts :)
interesting anthropomorphising of the waters, their comfort similar to that of a parent's - can definitely feel the narrator's fondness and consolation found within these waters