Lawn King

Lizards. Just lizards.

His throat puffs up as red as a brick

He sits like a king on top of a stick

He pushes his speckled chest up and down

Challenging all for a chance at the crown

They race and he braces himself for a fight

The girls hurry and scurry in flirtish delight

The battle ensues, and mercy is nil

Jaws lock and they twist in the effort to kill

Victory now, the King reigns on his throne

He decides that he won't be ruling alone

Sweet maiden who hides in bromeliad green

Sees her chance to become the true queen

When come to his side, their tails intertwine

And the rest of the kingdom politely resigns

As the moon wanders out and the night softly falls

The air is filled with their loving calls

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'Lawn King'
D.Connolly,
The wild kingdom is seen in the miniature as you weave this captivating tale of the lizard who would be king and he even will have his queen. How cute is that!? So here he is willing to battle for his crown in a physical duel. It feels like a old time story and all he needs is a sword. You played off of the natural world of nature and gave it a winsome twist with the classic feel of a medieval tale. Thanks for this. It was intriguing and inspiring.
Blessings,
Kathy

[D Connolly]

thank-you Kathy, and sorry for the delay in acknowledging your visit! I don't get on here very often and just saw this

[Ted Kniffen]

Love and hate among the lizards, and I thought Jim Morrison was the Lizard King. I liked the fun in this, D. The rhyming scheme was very good and how can you go wrong working in bromeliad. A fun write.

[D Connolly]

thank-you so much

[Tony Jordan]

i love the wordplay in the title. I'm sure Simba would approve (though Disney may sue...)
You made these cold-blooded wee beasties come across like him out of Titanic and Kate Winslet here.
Skilful unique tight rhyming Dani.

[D Connolly]

Thank-you Tony! Appreciate your patience (no more demanding messages for LAWN KING! LAWN KING! LOL). I'm glad the structure was enjoyable; I had to take a few to pick out the words I wanted. I like (if possible) for my poems to be pretty well sorted before I hit publish :)

[Tony Jordan]

You're welcome.
I'll call off the pickets outside your house now that it's been published !! lol
I tend to get all excited and press publish only to read it afterwards properly (usually after a few very quick-fingered readers have been and went "Hah ! He didn't even proof read this!")

*Note to Self* - Take leaf out of Dani's book re hitting publish.
:)

[D Connolly]

Get off of my lawn you pesky kids!

[Tony Jordan]

Oooer !! Run guys
She got a pun and she's not afraid to use it..!!

[Tony Jordan]

Whoa... Whoa... Dani!!!
You edited 'Lawn King'
I don't know if the kids that camped out all those hours in the cold will be happy that they weren't consulted.
There may be unease... it might grow to unrest... then to revolution.. Omg!

Just kidding.
It was nice to have an excuse to read it again. Lol

[D Connolly]

I only changed one word, thanks to Mr. Finger; I liked his suggestion :)

[Tony Jordan]

Haha love that username.
:)

[Valentine]

Fabulous job in your rhyming, This flows fast and really well. Kudos. Valentine

[D Connolly]

Thank-you so much!

[Valentine]

Dani, I owe you reviews. Best get that pen going. Kathie

[Lorry]

Nice. Maybe it is the fact that I, as a dinosaur (short arms, must have been a dinosaur in a previous life), relate to my distant relatives in this piece, as I wonder to myself...They don't work, pay bills, need insurance.....evolution sucks, I wanna be a dinosaur again :)

[Lorry]

Nice. Maybe it is the fact that I, as a dinosaur (short arms, must have been a dinosaur in a previous life), relate to my distant relatives in this piece, as I wonder to myself...They don't work, pay bills, need insurance.....evolution sucks, I wanna be a dinosaur again :)

[D Connolly]

Me too! I would like to have camouflage skin. That would be cool.

[mattavelli]

Hello, D! :)
This was a fun read.
I used to hunt the anoles with water guns when I was a boy. I don't see them as often. I've been seeing these fat brown curly tailed lizards everywhere.

[D Connolly]

they are everywhere here

[jacob erin-cilberto]

what a great allegorical tale...the likening of the lizard to the king...well done.

j.

[D Connolly]

thank-you very much for reading :)