Lawn King

Lizards. Just lizards.

His throat puffs up as red as a brick

He sits like a king on top of a stick

He pushes his speckled chest up and down

Challenging all for a chance at the crown

They race and he braces himself for a fight

The girls hurry and scurry in flirtish delight

The battle ensues, and mercy is nil

Jaws lock and they twist in the effort to kill

Victory now, the King reigns on his throne

He decides that he won't be ruling alone

Sweet maiden who hides in bromeliad green

Sees her chance to become the true queen

When come to his side, their tails intertwine

And the rest of the kingdom politely resigns

As the moon wanders out and the night softly falls

The air is filled with their loving calls

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'Lawn King'
D.Connolly,
The wild kingdom is seen in the miniature as you weave this captivating tale of the lizard who would be king and he even will have his queen. How cute is that!? So here he is willing to battle for his crown in a physical duel. It feels like a old time story and all he needs is a sword. You played off of the natural world of nature and gave it a winsome twist with the classic feel of a medieval tale. Thanks for this. It was intriguing and inspiring.
Blessings,
Kathy

[D Connolly]

thank-you Kathy, and sorry for the delay in acknowledging your visit! I don't get on here very often and just saw this

[Sheila Kline]

You say, "Lizards, just lizards", yet they are quite impressive! I enjoyed the flow, and explanation in your write; so clear that I can just see that lizard "gone 'a courtin', uh huh, he did go"-oh wait, that was a froggie....LOL
The guys really have to put up quite a fight for us gals and it "ain't" always a pretty fight, unless they are after a praying mantis, or another female who eats her mate! YIKES, better to be a lizard!

[D Connolly]

HAHA, thank-you for making me laugh Sheila, it's been a morning over here... I needed it. :)

[Terry O'Leary]

Very well done!
Can you imagine what it was like when the dinosaurs were courting!
Terry

[D Connolly]

LOL, raaaawwrrrr!

[Pete]

a very cool read. enjoyed this a lot. great rhyme. reptiles - both mysterious and misunderstood, as we can be.

[D Connolly]

yes, they are! when my uromastyx Sunshine died at 12 years of age, no one could understand why I was so upset; never mind that I hand fed this reptile every day since she was a baby... they are misunderstood! I love watching the anoles' antics when they play in the yard

[Pete]

hmmm. you floridians have all the fun.

[Paul Bell]

The things us guys have to do to win you over.
Hope after all his hard work, she doesn't have a headache. Maybe stay out the garden today.

[D Connolly]

You're so funny!

[andrew mitchell]

A great read, well written. Even lizards have it made, must be the tales I mean tails:)

[D Connolly]

thank-you andrew

[Jack Necron (Aubrey Jac..]

You have a style of rhyming that seems effortless and the stories within are vividly created. It's a tie for me between this and Shimmer as to which I like more. Thank you for sharing!

[D Connolly]

wow, that's really nice of you! Thank-you Jack!

[Jack Necron (Aubrey Jack Peaslee)]

You are welcome!

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Really fun read D, superb rhyming.
Starz x

[D Connolly]

thank-you very much for reading

[Davidgeo]

That's some pretty tight structure.

You have some bad a*s creative discipline.
This line...
"Sees her chance to become his true queen"

Change "his" to "the" and I think it sounds better in the scheme of things. I could be wrong though, I smoke a lot of grass.

[D Connolly]

the.... I will consider it. Perhaps she doesn't care too much for him, but the title itself. Good suggestion. I think I will, thank-you

[Davidgeo]

It's more empowering for the queen that way.

[Relic]

Compelling to read. I like poems that are stories.

Well done. (stands and claps). :)

[D Connolly]

Thank-you so much (curtsey)

[Einstein Noodle]

strong structure, story and rhyme says i! very much enjoyed this lizardly king poem .. and thank you so much for my word for the day "bromeliad" ..a wider vocabulary was a reason i decided to take up poetry .. and here at the cafe has surely done that ..so thanks for sharing this one .. enjoyable read for me!
E.

[D Connolly]

thank-you Einie

[Einstein Noodle]

awwwwwwww you called me Einie! ;))