Your "trick" of writing in couplets makes this more forceful than a lengthy diatribe. Combined with some good caustic wit, you have painted a picture that many of us have experience in our working life, but have never expressed it such a humorous way.
Your last triplet stanza was delightful. Sometimes, Dana, those spells can work.
Keep your fingers crossed.
Norman
Your "trick" of writing in couplets makes this more forceful than a lengthy diatribe. Combined with some good caustic wit, you have painted a picture that many of us have experience in our working life, but have never expressed it such a humorous way.
Your last triplet stanza was delightful. Sometimes, Dana, those spells can work.
Keep your fingers crossed.
Norman
"Don't Slip"
D.Connolly,
Well, this was just a blast to read cause every base was covered that needed to be. This writing was like a letter of advice to someone. It had just a tad of a warning twist which made it good at the end.
Another thing I like here was the psychological spin.
"Look at me, look at me desperation in your eyes
You need everyone to love you but i see through your disguise
Your veiled contempt for rivalries isn't missed by me
I saw the passing look of fear, you cannot hide your greed.
Taking parts of another's work and claiming as your own
You sit on piles of betrayal and lies, making it your own."
Our world sits on backs of bussiness people of all stripes. As long as people work and earn a wage I suppose this type of thing will be.
You really did a terrific job on this one!
Blessings,
Kathy
"Don't Slip"
D.Connolly,
Well, this was just a blast to read cause every base was covered that needed to be. This writing was like a letter of advice to someone. It had just a tad of a warning twist which made it good at the end.
Another thing I like here was the psychological spin.
"Look at me!, look at me!", desperation in your eyes
You need everyone to love you, but i see through your disguise
Your veiled contempt for rivalries isn't missed by me
I saw the passing look of fear, you cannot hide your greed.
Taking parts of another's work and claiming as your own
You sit on piles of betrayal and lies, making it your own."
Our world sits on backs of bussiness people of all stripes. As long as people work and earn a wage I suppose this type of thing will be.
You really did a terrific job on this one!
Blessings,
Kathy
Every workplace has a person or god forbid, people like this. Those that play office politics and mind games and do everything it takes to get ahead of the pack. Generally, as you have written, they are deeply despised and more often than not they fall on the sword of their own ambitions. No need to push. Just wait. She will fall. And then you can get the party started!
A very realistic write...or is that rant!?:)
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
LOL this office is a constant source of inspiration for me
Quite the familiar read many can relate to and presented beautifully. Gawd, don't cha just love having the pen as the preferred weapon over, say, the primitive (but stress-relieving) slap-some-sense option?
Thanks for sharing
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Hi Antonyo! I sometimes wish I could slap someone, but I think they mess themselves up enough LOL
7 Years Ago
Ha! Yes, I believe in that give'em rope technique myself.
One of my favorite aspects of this website is how we find little gems that connect with us on random, underlying levels. This is definitely one of them. It will go well with my library. Thank you for sharing.
Very well written. How I remember office politics in my own office. Makes me extra glad I am retired now.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Yes, it can get difficult sometimes!! This lady has moved on to new opportunities, so things are bac.. read moreYes, it can get difficult sometimes!! This lady has moved on to new opportunities, so things are back to normal :)
Excellent work Dani... Specially this one is an example of high class rhyming, from the beginning to the end. I think you made your point across to the person very well here with a calm yet strong enough voice... Well done...
Sincerely
Dhiman
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
That is a very nice compliment, thank-you very much. I'm glad you enjoyed this :)
Wow. This is so cool (the writing not the woman). I love this. 'bumptious claims'. awesome descriptions. so real and true. the sarcasm. punchy ending. great title. I can feel the disdain and contempt for her. all around excellent job.