In A Day's Work

A "demanding" woman kicks her husband to the curb!

Good morning my love!

Did you catch some good Z's?

Get yourself up

And I'll make our coffees

Can you take the trash out?

Oh, I know, I'm so cruel

Don't worry, I'll do it

After I get the kids off to school

I've had a long day at work

Babe, can you cook?

I want to sit down

And wipe the dust off my book

No? Well can you do the dishes

That are filling our sink?

I'm preparing our dinner and

Well, they're starting to stink

Oh, thanks!  You took the dog out!

Did you pick up the poop?

After you took her out last time

I stepped in it, OOPS!

I need you to vacuum

While I fold the laundry

OK, you're tired

Then just watch the TV

I need to shower...

Can you get the kids into bed?

Don't complain of the stories

You've read and re-read!

Fine... I'LL do it again

just turn out the lights

No need to argue

I don't want any fights

I'm really too tired

To tumble in bed

My feet are swollen

And there's an ache in my head

Oh, the whining, good grief!

You're like a small boy!

I'm not your slave

And I'm not your toy!

I've gotta get up

I've one more thing to do

I'm packing your bags

It's not me, it's you

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

WOW, what an empowering write. A marriage takes two people who are helpmates. There has to be a division of labor and power. I liked the way you described the situation. Great rhyming. Lydi**

[D Connolly]

thank-you!

[ReedWrite]

OMG...I love this! LOL...can I ever relate to this! You captured it beautifully. And you are so right...it's not YOU...it's HIM. You spend years thinking you're not good enough...you don't do enough...you can't juggle enough...you don't work hard enough. In the end, you realize you missed some of the best moments with your kids, because you were running around like a maniac, trying to be good enough for someone who will never be satisfied with good enough. Been there. Done that. Ain't going back. LOL. Love the flow and rhyme and rhythm and voice in this one. Love the spunk! You GO girl!

[D Connolly]

thank-you!

[KT-B]

fantastic loved this poem, well written, funny and oh so true!! Well done, thanks for sharing so enjoyed this :)

[D Connolly]

thank-you for the read and review!

[Lorry]

Ha, love the last line. Nothing like a sense of humour to get over a breakup. :)
As I was reading it, I pictured him on the sofa, with soda cans and candy wrappers all around, sighing....saying to himself " Yeah, a woman's work is never done, because they're lazy" :)
ps...His words, not mine :)

[D Connolly]

yeah, I've had one or two of these... not anymore thank goodness!

[Jackie L]

I absolutely loved this! The rhyming. The story it told. It was just great.

[D Connolly]

thank-you very much!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love it...have always wanted to be able to say "it's you, not me"

and as a last chore, she packs his bags....she's been on her own long before he is gone.

really like the wry humor.

j..

[D Connolly]

thank-you!

[mattavelli]

Hello, D! :)
I enjoyed your poem. it rhymes nicely, with clear phrasing and message. Marriage is teamwork. Ugh, housework... He should have set up a pretend project in the garage... Haha

[D Connolly]

haha, yes! at least that would keep him out of the way!

[barleygirl]

This is an excellently detailed & well-flowing motion picture of life around the house for a couple with kids & struggling over the sharing of chores. I think the woman does not sound as "demanding" as you led us to believe by your opening explanation line (below title). She sounds like she's tired of arguing about it & if she's going to be the only one taking care of things, why not be a single mother & decrease her "kid" load by one overgrown kid? This sounds & reads perfectly with rhyme & rhythm.

[D Connolly]

Yes, the "demanding" part was definitely sarcasm!! Thank-you for the review Margie :)