Chiaroscuro

composition of light and dark

The curve of our story

Along the soft pads of my toes

Notes scrawled

 

In colors composed

Let me be your canvas

Lay upon me your embrace

 

Saturate me

Show me the hues

The black lines of your art

 

Awash

In Ink of unspoken words

Upon my blank page

 

Truth embedded

Love letters gentle caress

A masterpiece mapped out

 

Upon my white translucent skin

In your darkest ink

Our love painted

 

In outlines of solemn secrets

Inscriptions not yet written

I surrender

 

With every word

Trusting Whispers dyed

Your pen etching

  

Across lazy afternoons

Intertwined fingers dancing

In sunlit shadows upon the floor

Reviews

[Tree]

Nice structure and form; slowed this reader down enough to absorb the imagery and the moment the poet would like for us to witness. Almost every one of these stanza's could stand on their own, each a stone that gives rise to a larger monument, dedicated to the moment. Well crafted piece.

[DCT ponderings]

Thank you Diego!

[Sami Khalil]

After reading this poem you have to surrender to its beauty. Nice form and flow to it too...Well done...:)

[DCT ponderings]

Thanks Sami. 5-7-5 seems to be a good rhythm for me. ;)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Shaun Payton]

A soft sensual caressing of the senses. Wonderful poet. I didnt want this poem to end haha I was held within each stanza, and left breathless.

[DCT ponderings]

Sadly all good things come to an end. ;) Thank you.

[Shaun Payton]

Yeah it is sad quite sad:( hehe lol

[quinfinn]

superbly executed and practically flawless. well done.

[DCT ponderings]

High praise Q. Thank you.

[Parsimony]

I like the idea of Chiaroscuro in poetic prose.

[DCT ponderings]

Me too. I don't think it should be reserved for the visual arts. Poetically there is so much richness in the interplay of light and dark.

[Samuel Jack]

I actually found this quite an erotic piece, not in a garish way but a sensual way. Nice work

[DCT ponderings]

Sensual was what I was aiming for. Thanks

[Callum]

Sweet! exactly what every guy would love...the "surrender".

re: "saturate" - it's my favorite word.

Cal :o)

[DCT ponderings]

We gals like the surrender as well. I have thing for certain words myself.

[Callum]

the "thing" is...certain words are always nice,, eh?

[DCT ponderings]

indeed!

[Nick.B]

Interesting concept, with a great imaginary that can make up want more, great job

[DCT ponderings]

Thank you

[Steven]

Some really nice moments here. I especially liked this image:

'Across lazy afternoons
Intertwined fingers dancing
In sunlit shadows upon the floor '

[DCT ponderings]

Thanks Steven. That's the funny thing about poetry. I actually wrote that stanza first. It was the theme really. Then I decided to move it to the end and think it works much better.

[anartao]

Great poem, i loved the comparison between the touch of skin to that of pen on paper that this invokes, and the last three lines are fantastic, and summon an imagery so strong it seems almost a memory !

[DCT ponderings]

Yes A Memory indeed of afternoons spent pen on skin....feet to be exact.