HELL

Lava maggots ripping through flesh

Rot in the air

And blood,

Some is fresh

 

Heat all around to unimaginable degrees

Blisters on the tongue

Elbows and knees

 

Noises coming from every direction

Chattering teeth

And painful erections

 

Lashes of fire

Across the back

While creatures of the damned

Have you as a snack

 

Pulling off your skin

And ripping out your eye

Wishing every second

That you could just die

 

Blood oozing out

Along with puss

This is the fate of many of us

 

There will not be an escape

Once you arrive

The first thing is thirst

As you are water deprived

 

The heat so intense it will boil your snot

And you will hate to breathe

In the air that's so hot

 

So keep up your wickedness

And wait your turn

There is enough fire in hell

For all to burn

Reviews

[Kenny L. Mitchell]

DAYMN! Nature you're scary! Great work!

[David Lewis Paget]

Very visual, though I don't believe in hell myself. If hell is anywhere, it's right here.
People fail to remember that once we get where we're going, we will be in spirit form, so fire will not affect us one way or the other. No body, no burning.

[TAO]

Burn, baby, burn. I like this piece a lot. Of course, if you can't tell by my pic, I'm not one to shy away from overt visions of darkness and torment. The chaos of it suits me, and I can definitely vibe on the chaos I feel from this piece, here. I haven't misconstrued your meaning; the wicked suffer. But, because I'm at home, and find life, and meaning, where this is a flame, I am touched by this poem.


Don't judge me. I like it hot.

[Livana Lowell]

Okay, okay, I won't steal candy anymore! Just kidding, this is my favorite kind of writing and I loved every bit of it except, this one line was kind of too awkward: "As you are water deprived" The rhythm stopped for me with that, but otherwise, I enjoyed this poem.

[The Analog Kid]

Wow...potent stuff. "Boil your snot!" Love it...very descriptive!

[~Princess~]

this made me cry. I loved it. Good job. keep up the good work.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Whatever vice a person has..this poem could make them drop it.
This is a terrifying warning that our actions have consequences
in one way or another.

[Senseless whatever]

Good write, great descriptions. A little anger in this one.