AFTER WE KISSED

This poem is a spin off of "THE WAY WE KISS"

My lips so anxious

Yerning for another shot

At gentle sweetness

Passion and burning desire

Creates a rot of spoil

Turmoil for those seconds

That we split

First my lips screamed

Encore…

Then my body followed

Seeking even more

What a moment of heat

Created by a sweet

Yet deadly kiss

That would set off the immoral

Demons of lust

Two bodies close

Ready to start the ritual of

Touching…

Rubbing…

Biting…

Needing…

Feeling…

Built up pressures

Ready to release

Throbbing butterflies

 

Reviews

[Gregory H.]

Really written and passonite poem...Great job...

10/10

AA
Gregory

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Passioniate perfection

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Whoa! I like the chaotic nature of this poem. Everything feels so out of control.
You nailed the intended emotions here.

My lips so anxious

Yerning for another shot

I like the way you just threw us right into the action. The ending is pretty cool as well. I like the way it ends. I never thought "Throbbing butterflies" could be a calming thing, but this poem is so full of passion...that it's actually where it slows down. lol This poem is way out of control, but in the best possible way.

[Senseless whatever]

This is great. Fantastic buildup leading the mind to 'other' worlds.
"That would set off the immoral

Demons of lust

Two bodies close

Ready to start the ritual of

Touching…

Rubbing…

Biting…

Needing…

Feeling…"
I actually was so into it I misread feeling as feeding!!
of course both are good (blush)

[The Analog Kid]

HOT...I like the phrase "Demons of lust!" Also I like
"First my lips screamed
Encore…
Then my body followed
Seeking even more"

Clever and sensual as heck..

Patrick