THE UNKNOWN

     Tara sat on the edge of her bed after a long day of work. She leaned over to unlace her shoes when she glanced at a picture of her ex-boyfriend on her nightstand. She and her ex broke up a week ago, he forgot her birthday. She leaned over and picked the picture up. The picture was a still proposal of her ex kneeling down on one knee with a life savor in a jewelry box. Tara giggled as her thoughts flashed back to that day. "What a goofball" she mumbled as she put the picture back into its place.
     Tara's mind swirled, as she thought about calling her ex and patching things up. “If I call him first, he'll think he's out of the deep!" Tara stared at the picture on her nightstand.  "What the heck!" She thought aloud. She reached into her bag, which rested next to her on the bed, and pulled out her cell phone. All she had to do is hit talk, since his number was the only number she dialed.
     The phone rang, and rang, no answer. Tara became angry. In her selfish little way, she felt he should be available whenever she needed him to be.
Tara dialed the number again. The phone rang and rang and stills no answer. Tara's imagination took over and she accused him in her head of cheating with some gorgeous babe. That was not the case, as he watched her from his side of the realm. He reaches out for her, but could not touch her. He saw her, but she could not see him. The warping portal faded in and out, his time in between worlds was running out. He had to reach out and say good bye. Tara nor no other of the flesh knows of his accident. His body laid cold and disfigured from a long accidental fall down his basement stairs

Reviews

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

OMG. This is Bone Chilling. The tension in the air was just amazing. I felt the emotions throughout it all. You had sadness, confusion, immaturity, and passion all in the same piece. That was one intense ride for the size of this story. The story ends with tension. It left me feeling like I could have read more, but I still loved the way it ended. I love how it begins and ends with wonderful energy.

Genuine love rings out through the words. It's not watered down with anything that would dilute. Great job!

[Constance-Outspoken]

I wish this were longer. I always want more from you, woman. I like, of course. And so true that we never know what will happen next.

[Senseless whatever]

Very cool. The leading in is great something most if not all of us can relate to, not being able to connect with that special someone. Then BAM the unknown uncontrolled happens and destiny slaps you in the face. The follow up for Tara is the 'what if' questions. What if I were there and so on. Very good Write.

[HermitsUnited]

Ahhh! That's really good, but it's so sad! I like it! Almost brought tears to my eyes. Gee, I have turned into such an emotional person since 2 weeks ago. My dog died on this exact day, 2 weeks ago. It was horrible!

[The Analog Kid]

Nice, I just blocked someone (an old friend that got carried away) from calling/texting me. She too felt I should be available to come to her emotional rescue...LOL!

Just shows how we never know what's in other people's situation--no matter how close you are. Maybe he would have answered the phone. She'll never know...Sweet write, I enjoyed it.


Patrick

[Comatose]

This is so sad...I really liked it. Great job. ^^

[JustJordan. x3]

I really like this, just the situation that the girl decides. It sorta sounds like maybe he killed himself but you changed it up telling how he died, very good.