Love gone awry

Love gone awry

A Poem by DACAC

Why did we stop, when we still had that long way ahead of us
?

The moon used to shine us, but now it’s dark, and I feel so alone


I wish everything could be like it once used to be before, please dig me out this hole


I’m falling deep, my soul is missing, and my heart is breaking, and I’m digging into an

Unknown zone

 

What's the point of holding onto what never gets used?

 I try not to worry, but you've got me terrified.

It's like you’re in some kind of hurry to say goodbye.

 

I never wanted this to end, no


I wanted this to be forever


I don’t want to go on having to pretend

 But what gives

I know better


And you’re gone forever, forever

 

 

What's the point of holding onto what never gets used?

 I try not to worry, but you've got me terrified.

 It's like you’re in some kind of hurry to say goodbye.

© 2014 DACAC


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Did you mean "The moon used to shine on us" instead of "The moon used to shine us"? If not, I don't really understand that sentence. If you did, minor grammar mistake :) When you write poems, I feel that the less words to convey the same message, the better. So for "I wish everything could be like it once used to be before" I would write "I wish for everything to be as it once was". If that's not how you write poetry normally, don't change your style just because that's how I write. This poem is great and gets me thinking, because I have actually been trying to sort through my feelings with my girlfriend.

Posted 9 Years Ago


DACAC

9 Years Ago

I think it reads a little funny because this was meant to be a song, but I changed it to a song. But.. read more
Dragonhawk0

9 Years Ago

Did you ever record the song? I think it would be cool to listen to! And you are right, songs tend t.. read more
DACAC

9 Years Ago

I didn't record it, i'm not a singer. But I think the original version would sound better as a song.

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Added on November 19, 2014
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