Hemispheres

I had ink and sex on the brain.

just this, after much
thought and white-
hot fire at dusk-

I could do with
a bite from your
ink-laced teeth .

I could do with
a tattoo spanning
thirty-two jaw-
dropping notes.

 

 

Reviews

[H.]

This is very passionate. Jury's out on that third stanza, though--but I do much adore puns. There's not much of a thread between a tattoo and music though, and it seems out of place.

[J. A. Svercek]

Very nice. Is the period in the second stanza meant to be misplaced?