In front Of Them

His headlights were stars,

That stuck to the ground 

Like the UFO's in Close Encounters.

She stood on the sidewalk,

not too far from him;

Looking like a model on a billboard sign. 

The moon rising to her right

And the sun setting to her left.

But she was more stunning - than even the roses on her dress. 

She was looking at his headlights.

He was looking at her eyes. 

Their peripheral vision was of the sunset and moon-rise. 

He was a nerd with glasses and freckles.

She was a bombshell that had not yet blossomed. 

His jaw dropped, her smile picked it back up - perfect. 

He got out the car and met her at the passenger door. 

She wrapped her arms around him and stood like a necklace in front of him.

She was looking at the moon and he was looking at the sun. 

Now that they were together they could clearly see what was in front of them.  

  

11/7/16 written by Cyprian Van Dyke 

edited on the 8th with the help of https://storywrite.com/shapeshifter 

Author's Note

What made reading this poem worthwhile for you??

Reviews

[Alice Poésy]

What gorgeous imagery, Cyprian. So beautifully done. I've reread it several times in the hopes I'll remember certain phrases as they're so romantic.

"She was looking at the moon and he was looking at the sun." So beautiful.

You managed to capture a small set of photographs with your words, giving us a stunning little story. A huge well done to you, sir!

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you, Alice. You put a smile on my face, like always.

[Paul Bell]

What I pick up from this is, even nerds can have a stunning chick. But this may also go through time.
They might be adults now.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Excellent observation. Thank you for your review :)

[Homason]

"His jaw dropped, her smile picked it back up - perfect." I love the sense of imagery brought by these lines.
Homason.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you very much. :)

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Cyprian... An attraction inspired by the
sun... being able to dance and
wish for the moon. truly dream, Pat

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you, Pat
Your review is beautiful!

[Patricia Wedel]

You are welcome... This is a
favorite poem, now and always.
It is fun and passionate.., truly, Pat

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

I'm happy to hear that it's a favorite :)
:) Thanks again, your words are encouraging.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"He was a nerd with glasses and freckles.
She was a bombshell that had not yet blossomed.
His jaw dropped, her smile picked it back up - perfect."
Loved these lines!! Also the imagination and combination of words used are beautiful.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you very much :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You are welcome :)

[Jamey]

The first two stanzas really sucked me in...great metaphors..imagery fantastic..roses on her dress..great stuff man

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thanks bro. The roses on her dress was a nice touch, I thought. I thought roses would be nice in the story, (imagery wise) so I had her wearing it rather than holding it. Thanks again.

[Einstein Noodle]

clever twist at the end ..i enjoyed the scenes triggered ..really like the headlights thing ..driving at such a speed, however, i would not peg him for the "nerd" ...saw him more as a James Dean type ..i also enjoy the triggered memories of pubescent love, the '57 Chevy and the poster girl on the corner ..life was never so awkward nor so dangerous ..two of the big reasons i would never wish to repeat my time spent there ;)
E.
ps i agree with Ms. Lydia about that line ..its memorable ..and i also enjoyed this one " She wrapped her arms around him and stood like a necklace in front of him." ...just so easy to see and feel the scene ..

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you very much. Hmm, never thought about the speed. Good thought. I never thought those times would have been that bad, yet I know that the world has always been bad. It took me a while to learn just how to explain that type of hug lol. Thank you again, for the review. :)

[Einstein Noodle]

not bad ..just awkward for me .. i enjoy the peace of finding myself and being OK with it ..not worrying about impressing anyone ;) and as we all know about the mythical belief in teenage boys being indestructible deciding to get up out of bed can be a catastrophe waiting to happen eh!? :) read your poem again ..a good ride ..even better re-reading

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Oh, I see. Affirmative, The world is like high-school, not everyone has a great time in it. I don't, that's why I write lol. Hey thanks for re-reading poem, that means a lot to me. :)

[Lydia Shutter]

What a gloriously romantic write this is! "His jaw dropped, her smile picked it back up - perfect." Indeed, perfect. Two opposites attracted to one another and making a life together....just delightful. I could picture the scene. Lydi**

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you, Lydi :)