In front Of Them

His headlights were stars,

That stuck to the ground 

Like the UFO's in Close Encounters.

She stood on the sidewalk,

not too far from him;

Looking like a model on a billboard sign. 

The moon rising to her right

And the sun setting to her left.

But she was more stunning - than even the roses on her dress. 

She was looking at his headlights.

He was looking at her eyes. 

Their peripheral vision was of the sunset and moon-rise. 

He was a nerd with glasses and freckles.

She was a bombshell that had not yet blossomed. 

His jaw dropped, her smile picked it back up - perfect. 

He got out the car and met her at the passenger door. 

She wrapped her arms around him and stood like a necklace in front of him.

She was looking at the moon and he was looking at the sun. 

Now that they were together they could clearly see what was in front of them.  

  

11/7/16 written by Cyprian Van Dyke 

edited on the 8th with the help of https://storywrite.com/shapeshifter 

Author's Note

What made reading this poem worthwhile for you??

Reviews

[Alice Poésy]

What gorgeous imagery, Cyprian. So beautifully done. I've reread it several times in the hopes I'll remember certain phrases as they're so romantic.

"She was looking at the moon and he was looking at the sun." So beautiful.

You managed to capture a small set of photographs with your words, giving us a stunning little story. A huge well done to you, sir!

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you, Alice. You put a smile on my face, like always.

[Hebe]

It's so simple and elegant, ..... It came to life, like a scene in a movie! Wonderful piece...

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you for your much appreciated review.

[Dhaye]

So romantic. In front of them is a wonderful future...a great love story.
This is an amazing piece. Kudos!

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you very much! :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Your poetry is so beautiful. This was no exception, and this one was also so romantic.
The way the charicters see eachother is beautiful and the way they connect is also beautiful.
This was just Beautiful to read.
Sorry one to many beautiful's.
Though that's the main word that comes to mind when reading this poem :)
Wonderful write indeed.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you! Beautiful is probably the most beautiful-est word there is, and I'm privileged that you used it with my writing. :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Lol true. Your most welcomez :)

[I Am Svetlana]

Aw, the future unfolds such marvelous things sometimes...I really enjoyed the imagery and the story within. Love comes in many shapes and forms, so nothing is impossible. Those who may seem out of our league, may well be who we were supposed to fall in love with.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

What a stunning capture of everything I said, "the future unfolds such marvelous things sometimes." Thank you! Your review was a pleasure to read. :)

[Pete]

The anticipation of where it was going and how it would end. Great descriptions. You certainly have a vivid imagination and creativity. "His jaw dropped, her smile picked it back up - perfect." - great line. Title sums up nicely.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you, Pete, for your much appreciated review. :)

[FIN]

This is gorgeous. A tale of love told extremely well. The imagery, magnificent. The story wonderful. I'm in awe great job!

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you very much!

[Ted Kniffen]

Cyprian, I believe it was the interplay of words describing this scene that did it for me, especially the line 'His jaw dropped, her smile picked it back up - perfect.' All in all, brilliant. Good write 

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you, Ted, for your review. It means a lot. :)

[ReedWrite]

I loved the imagery...the feelings evoked by the unfolding story.
There is a sense of expectation...of intrigue...of heightening tension, almost...
and then: She was looking at the moon and he was looking at the sun. Now that they were together they could clearly see what was in front of them.
Resolution...fulfillment...completeness.
Nicely done.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you, very, for your much appreciated review! :)

[Lisa Lindsey]

Oh my I love the imagery and the symmetry. Brother Sun meets Sister Moon at twilight. And the blind date is no longer blind. I loved every line but especially the last one wraps it all up nicely..."Now that they were together they could clearly see what was in front of them."

Bravo.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you very much. Your comment is a beautiful reflection of my poem, thanks again. :)

[Kelly Scheppers]

You directed this brilliantly with such flair and awe. I was waiting to hear a loud "that's a wrap"...

Much applause!

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Your review is awesome!! Thank you very much!!