In front Of Them

His headlights were stars,

That stuck to the ground 

Like the UFO's in Close Encounters.

She stood on the sidewalk,

not too far from him;

Looking like a model on a billboard sign. 

The moon rising to her right

And the sun setting to her left.

But she was more stunning - than even the roses on her dress. 

She was looking at his headlights.

He was looking at her eyes. 

Their peripheral vision was of the sunset and moon-rise. 

He was a nerd with glasses and freckles.

She was a bombshell that had not yet blossomed. 

His jaw dropped, her smile picked it back up - perfect. 

He got out the car and met her at the passenger door. 

She wrapped her arms around him and stood like a necklace in front of him.

She was looking at the moon and he was looking at the sun. 

Now that they were together they could clearly see what was in front of them.  

  

11/7/16 written by Cyprian Van Dyke 

edited on the 8th with the help of https://storywrite.com/shapeshifter 

Author's Note

What made reading this poem worthwhile for you??

Reviews

[Alice Poésy]

What gorgeous imagery, Cyprian. So beautifully done. I've reread it several times in the hopes I'll remember certain phrases as they're so romantic.

"She was looking at the moon and he was looking at the sun." So beautiful.

You managed to capture a small set of photographs with your words, giving us a stunning little story. A huge well done to you, sir!

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you, Alice. You put a smile on my face, like always.

[Ayvid N]

Dear Cyprian,

What made this read worthwhile is the sheer romance you have woven so seamlessly into the picture. You not just paint into the picture the beauty of youth but also give the reader a panoramic view of the sunset and moon rise, perhaps symbolically for the budding romance.
We can see through the eyes of the lovers and drink in their euphoria. Their vision is amazing and their breath is exhilarating.

A wonderfully written poem.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you, Divya, for your smile making review.

[Ayvid N]

Its always a pleasure, dear Cyprian! 😊

[Ankita Dwivedi]

You make the reader smile with simple but beautiful picture you paint. That is what was worthwhile.. Also what you have written as your intro it is really relatable and true that we are not the same person our whole lives.. Thank you.
Love, Ankita

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you for your lovely review and for making the connection. Ankita

[Asmae]

"she was looking at the moon and he was looking at the sun"
so simple yet so beautifully written *^*

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you very much :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful use of description.
"He got out the car and met her at the passenger door.
She wrapped her arms around him and stood like a necklace in front of him.
She was looking at the moon and he was looking at the sun. "
The above lines I loved. Complete poem create visions of beauty and perfect place. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you Coyote for your review :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[The dark story]

Oh my God! This is so brilliant and stupendous. The symbolism and metaphors are carving out the picture so perfectly.
"His jaw dropped, her smile picked it back up - perfect. " I smiled when I read this line.

"The moon rising to her right
And the sun setting to her left.
But she was more stunning - than even the roses on her dress. "

This stanza is so vivid and layers of significance. I loved how you have portrayed a small period of time into this magnitude, stretching beyond time. Such a pleasure to read this poem. Thanks for sharing.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you, very! I smiled reading your review. I'm glad to know you liked my poem!

[Willard Wells]

Interesting twist on love. Nice work.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you very much! :)

[Tazeen Ahmed]

I admire the way you have described the beauty here...
It's creative and symbolically meaningful!
Well captured!:)

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you, Tazeen, very! :)

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Cyprian Van Kyke,
This was so cool! Boy meets girl in a really different way but it seems more imaginative and symbolic somehow. Maybe even a dream..............the moonlight, the sunlight? She being caught in his headlights? "He was a nerd with glasses and she a bombshell. What a fun combination. Thank you for writing I really enjoyed it.......................Blessings to you. Kathy

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you, Kathy. I'm glad you liked it. Yes, it was different, it's just the way I like it :)

Have a beautiful day. Cyprian

[KTizzle]

The only thing I didn't like was this line, "She was a bombshell that had not yet blossomed." The cliche of saying "bombsell" took me out of the image you were trying to portray for me. I felt like I loved the way you described things so much, I wanted more. What did this woman smell like? Did she smell like flowers, perfume? What were her eyes like? I felt like if you incorporated more of the senses, you could do more with mentioning her as a billboard sign or a bombshell.

Otherwise, what made it worthwhile for me was the way it was put together. I liked the line, "Like the UFO's in Close Encounters." It gave the setting an out-of-this world type of vibe. The rest of the lines really took me into a surreal picture of this woman. Just like the others, I agree I really loved, "She was looking at the moon and he was looking at the sun." I loved them because of how it aligns with the title. You have placed them in the perfect time to view the ideal light of themselves.

Good job.

Thanks for posting!

- Jazz

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you, Jazz for your delight to read review!

Most of the time I do call to the other scenes when I limn, so I can really appreciate your viewpoint about her appearance. I'm sorry that the "bombshell" line took you out of the imagery, that was one of my favorite lines.

Thank you, very, for your reflections! Your review is such a delight to read. :)

[Ishwar Grewal]

beautiful...!
loved readin it......

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you very for saying! :)