and the love affair falls to the archenemy ."tragedy" ... for me this is a delightful read as the nerds and dorks of us rise on super power wings of love ...we do have a chance after all ... very smooth free form and your straight forward language brings the story home clear as a bell ... relating it to Shakespeare is clever ... it works and elevates the whole scene conjured ... so for me! i like it! fun, yet serious.
E.
Posted 8 Years Ago
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Thank you for your review, it was fun to read, very well said! :)
"Superman and Juliet'
Cyprian Van Dyke,
Your connections between the characters of Romeo and juliet is clever. Modern day or a depiction of the old love story. I appreciate the way you have thought and interpreted the relationship from the way both characters think and also from their reality from the stories about them.
"Lois walks to him as he slowly lands."
and
"She can understand her heart's Morse code."
The translation aspect is also good;
translates Clark Kent" and "his heartbeat translates "Lois Lane'
Fun poem and an interesting look at the inner works of these two characters.
blessings,
Kathy
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
Thank you, Kathy Van Kurin, for your detail review! I'm glad to hear you like this poem of mine and .. read moreThank you, Kathy Van Kurin, for your detail review! I'm glad to hear you like this poem of mine and saw deep into it. :)
I love to gaze into the depths of meaning. Don't know if i get it right half the time....but well. f.. read moreI love to gaze into the depths of meaning. Don't know if i get it right half the time....but well. fun poem you wrote and I am glad you did!
Kathy
I dont like superman much but i like any love poem/story. Story in a poem lol. This was romantic and sweet once again.
Like your poems and enjoy reading them.
Keep writing :)
An extra ordinary writing. As to the author's note, this poem is very novel, sentimental and romantic. I feel that you are a versatile writer. I hope to take time and read more of your work. Enjoyed the visit. Thank you for sharing.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Thank you very much for your much appreciated review. :)
The romantic story-telling aspect obviously made it worthwhile to read, for me.
And the use of metaphors and similes, to connect Lois Lane and Superman with Romeo and Juliet.
The simplicity at which you approached the subject matter made it for an easy, and I feel, powerful read.
(Something I need to work on; concision is valuable.)
Great job.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Thank you very much for your insightful review. :) You taught me a new word, (concision), thank you.. read moreThank you very much for your insightful review. :) You taught me a new word, (concision), thank you for that :) I'm glad to read you liked my poem!
You're very good at 'setting a scene' and painting the characters with creativity and drawing parallels. The star-crossed lover theme comes up a lot in modern and classic culture/literature. Nice work.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Thank you, Pete. Your review is much appreciated! :)
a very interesting writer...the way you take tv and movie characters and give us poems that we can relate to with people in our lives...the times we feel like those characters, love like those characters...
the nerd's Romeo..yes, Clark Kent...
Lois and Clark...we all have our balcony scenes whether they are on balconies or not.
j.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Thank you for your review. I'm glad you could relate. Yes, what you say is so true, we all do have o.. read moreThank you for your review. I'm glad you could relate. Yes, what you say is so true, we all do have our balcony scenes in life, in past, present or future.
"Romeo and Juliet" was, of course, one of Shakespeare's tragedies - star-crossed lovers for whom lasting love could never be. I guess Superman and Lois Lane could never have a lasting love either, being from different planets. An interesting comparison!
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Thank you very much for the review! Glad you liked my poem.
What an unusual comparison! I'm so happy you thought of it. Clark Kent and Lois Lane - Romeo and Juliet, that's genius.
Such a sweet piece which melted my heart. There's always a special place in my heart for these two tragic couples, and I'm happy you introduced them in a place together. I think they would have gotten along well, honestly. Imagine them going on double dates.
If you're not into reading but love movies, here's why you should give my poems a read:
I've been told many times that my writing is cinematic. I love movies and video games and I really aspire t.. more..