Oh My Knight - A Goddess Standing Beside A Princess

Pushed down by a beautiful goddess, helped up by a powerful knight with a game plan.

After a night to remember, 
I wake up in my bed under a sheet of sunlight, 
In a city like the lost Atlantis. 

My thoughts of last night are a blur,
I vaguely remember a party,
And two voices among whispers. 
"A goddess, 
A goddess, standing beside a princess." 
The only ones standing outside of costumes, 
In a room full of knights, 
Stuffed with masculine jewels. 

I walked to her with a mask-less face. 
With dry lips, I said, "Hi."  
But I got pushed away by her rolling eyes. 
The floor was like the sky,
I kept falling, waiting to hit the ground and die. 

At the feet of knights, I rose once again,  
At that, a knight slithered past,
Leaving his sword in my hand. 
Not knowing what to do,
I drew upon my imagination*. 
I defeated the goddess and avenged my soul. 

Later that night the goddess’ body was found, 
Beside the sword, I allegedly stole. 
Word broke out and a rumor roamed, 
Onto the streets, under the gloom. 

Then the sunlight touched my face. 
Opening my eyes I see it’s a new day.
The world is bright andI'lll walk 
Through this maze of city buildings,
Wearing a smile on my face,   
To show my sanity… after that revolution.

1/22/2016      

Pen name: Cyprian Van Dyke 

Author's Note

Footnote: If you imagined you did something, did you really do it?
This is just a hint to understanding my story here.

I'm interested in knowing what kind of writer I am.
What made reading it worthwhile?

Reviews

[Sweet]

My love for fantasy drew me into this poem, that reads to me like a beautiful story.
I find the story it tells very interesting and intriguing, it left me pondering and seeking for the meaning behind this dream.
I'm still wondering, why did he kill her? Was it to because she rejected him and his pride/ego was hurt? What about the princess? Did he kill the Goddess so he can be with the princess? My brain just runs wild with so many questions XD
Thank you for sharing this poem, I really enjoyed it, it was very entertaining ^_^

And to reply to your author's note. I don't think I can really define what kind of writer you are, but from the stories you wrote, I see your style as fiction/fantasy, which I love. You have an overflowing imagination that gifts you with awesome stories, I hope you keep writing more of them =D

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you for your review!
Yes, that is why. No he had not interest in the princess.
Thank you for answering my question in the authors note. It's a help to me.

[Sweet]

Your welcome ^_^ Ah ok, makes sense, thx for answering my questions, but then it stills makes me wonder what happened to the princess then XD (I know... I think too much about small things lol)

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Now that you said, "small things," let me ask you a question.
What if i told you that he didn't kill the goddess, but that he was willfully framed? Which is true and true i didn't say that and i understand why my readers would not come to that conclusion. I', sure it's not the first time a writer was blinded into thinking he was writing something he was merely thinking. Every time i re-read i followed the characters a different way.

[Sweet]

O_O wow, brain running wild even more now XD
When I first read this poem, I was wondering why the knight gave him the sword... Then I thought, well maybe he just dropped it on accident... Nah, a knight wouldn't be that dumb/clumsy... maybe he wanted to help the guy seek revenge.... hmmm, maybe...?

*I read it once again. grasped a few details*
"At that a knight slithered past, Leaving his sword in my hand... I drew upon my imagination.
I defeated the goddess and freed my soul. ... Beside the sword i allegedly stole."

Now that you mention it and I put all the pieces together, the idea of him being framed seems so clear, it makes complete sense.
Why the knight killed the Goddess is a mystery, but he was cunning enough to frame someone else. (Maybe the princess paid the knight so he kills the Goddess so she could reign in her stead. Or the Goddess was a tyrant and the knights wanted to get rid of her... I'll stop here with my random thoughts lol)
Thanks for this new perspective, it made me love the poem even more ^_^

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Lol, no a knight wouldn't be so dumb i suppose. I like the way you said it.
Yes, you got it! The knights wanted to get rid of her. The last line said, "revolution."
The goddess rejected the man so cruelly that it made the knight realize a revolution was necessary. But the night gave him the credit by cleverly framing him.
You cracked the case! Thank you for your comment. It was thrilling to read! Thank you for putting the effort in understanding it!!!! HUGS

[Sweet]

Yay !!! I solved the case. "Every puzzle has an answer!" lol, np. It was fun for me. I always like to understand things, and when a problem is not solved it can bug me a lot XD
If you add mystery in your future stories, I'd delight myself in trying to solve them too ^_^
But mystery or not, your stories have been great so far. *hugs*

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Okay, thank you. I'm always trying to progress with wisdom.
Thank you for the compliment. Your writing has been remarkable too by the way!

[Sweet]

That's great ^_^ keep up the good work! I'll keep trying my best, thx.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you! And you're most welcome!

[AliciaB]

I'd say that there are many elements that make reading this worthwhile, among them the fact that it is intriguingly enigmatic. The story is rather convoluted and obscure, leaving it very open to interpretation, which is cool. There are many interesting paradoxes in this poem: "After a night to remember... My thoughts of last night are a blur"; "The only ones standing outside of costumes... mask-less face... Wearing only a smile on my face"; "The floor was like the sky, / I kept falling, waiting to hit the ground and die", etc. You have definitely done a good job of expressing the intricate, confusing nature of dreams with this piece (at least, I interpreted it as a dream - but once again, it's open to the reader's perspective, and that's what makes it so interesting!) Keep up the great work!

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Wow, i love your comment! Love you choice of words, you educated me with "enigmatic" and "convoluted." Thank you! I applaud your interpretation. I'm happy to know you felt that reading it was so worth while. Thank you again!!!

[AliciaB]

You are most welcome! :)

[reluctantsyren]

Was she found wrapped in sheets? Besides the sword you allegedly stole? High allegory there...I'd add that line in
after that...revolution would be fitting
really good!
You could play around with line breaks, but solid!

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you very much! You give me something to think about.
Thank you for teaching me a new word, "allegory". :)

[reluctantsyren]

You're very welcome! I look forward to more good writing by you!

[Amber Lily]

I must say the imagination in this piece is what did it for me! I write a lot of things based off of my dreams, so I can completely relate to that last bit. In everyday life I may just be an ordinary person, but in my dreams I am a legend :) Loved it!

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you very!
Dreams are awesome!

[hellfolia]

the thing that made reading it worthwhile was the mystery of it. it wasn't really a mysterious piece but you have a mysterious aura about your writing style and it made for a very enjoyable poem, nice job

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you very much for your insightful comment!

[Cole Hayley]

I walked to her with a mask-less face.
With dry lips i said, "Hi."
But i got pushed away by her rolling eyes.
The floor was like the sky,
I kept falling, waiting to hit the ground and die.



That's definitely the standout bit for me, I think you're a really good storyteller (I read your prior work as well) and that storytelling stands out here.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you very very much!

[Philip Muls]

A poem of mythical proportions. Well done.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Loved this tale of fantasy and dream.
Imagery and flow is bang on!
Philosophy interests me and so did this piece.
Kudos!

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you Jyoti!
I like the way you talk!
Philosophy huh, I'll keep that in mind.
read moreThank you Jyoti!
I like the way you talk!
Philosophy huh, I'll keep that in mind.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Cool!
You are welcome.

[Matching Socks]

Has a bit of a dungeons and dragons feel to it.
Fantasy blending into our reality.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Beautifully worded comment!
Thank you!

[Matching Socks]

My pleasure. :)

[Tom]

A revealing reverie...escapism at its poetic best, creatively conveyed !

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Wow, thank you very much!

[Dhaye]

A great piece of writing about waking up with your positive state of mind after a slight nightmare.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you very much!