Everest

A brief free verse poem in the mind of my beloved feline pet named Everest. Forever missed.

And here unto,
The bare trees of winter confinement,
I exceed the boundaries of welcome fatality;
To and fro,
From the fatherly river i cross,
Tears dappled against my face,
From the astringent beings that lost their touch,
I faintly swim ashore,
An apparition unseen;
Sanguine fluids exuded from detached clumps of fur;
Flesh bare and fresh;
As the barriers of my coexisting affection stand afoot a gimp figure;
Tears a-stream their muddled faces.

I am to cross these holy waters -
The haven in which never recedes its awakening;
Surpassing the era of humility and conformity;
Filled to the brims with happiness and gaiety as its reverence;
Bound by compassion and purity,
Commenced to safe freedom -
I relish it all as my brethren leads me amidst the heavenly gates,
Unreturning to the cold fronts that sway across the crimson droplets of our breathing selves;
Jubilance aloof;
As we set across plush fields;
Seeking congruity as we wait along the shore line;
Remembrance of our family,
In which we stand humbly for their return,
And thankfully of their guidance.

Author's Note

While this piece of poetry is a little older, I sought to share it with the community as an untouched reference to past talents now accumulated into stronger knowledge. Feedback is greatly appreciated.

Reviews

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I can certainly see from this poem that you love to present your works in an unconformist literary style.

Personally, the language used is exceptionally good. Very well worded and gives a rather simple thematic idea a grander presence. The downside of using such language, of course, is that those readers without expanded vocabulary will have trouble understanding your work. I can completely understand the gist of your piece; written about the death of your pet.

I guess the key to creative writing is to make the work original, interesting, well written but also accessible.

I find the piece very well written. I just hope that others can understand it and reap its delight as well. Nice work.

[Cynical]

Thank you Doodley! And, ah, yes as I've learned throughout time from lessons presented to me in my daily classes, it is important to keep writing transcribable - something I drift away from quite often. Originally personal poems derived from influence of the book The Strange Case of Dr Jekyll and Mr Hyde, I've decided to share these few works with the community, and nonetheless I look forward to implementing newer more accessible forms of writing. And as always, thank you for your review!

[Tobias Ådin]

This was truly beautiful; a masterpiece like none other!
I really can't think of anything to critique; it truly was captivating from start to finish. Very well written!

[Cynical]

Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed it!