I recently lost a family member, very connectable feeling.
I like this poem a lot, there is a heaviness in the words, the spacing, the alignment.
"the dust which dulled fabrics" brings the realization that it has been some time that this has happened, yet the inability to accept it is present.
Following by "Is cleared away" gives me the implication that the world has seemed to move on but you haven't, the ghost hasn't, the spirit hasn't.
Using the words "space" and "gravity" together gives me the picture of a universe. Instead of just being along in a room or a house, it feels as if you are alone in the universe.
And to state the obvious, the repetition of "i know you are gone" ties this poem together nicely. Good job.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
I'm sorry for your loss. But I'm glad you like it, and I enjoyed hearing your take on it. Thanks for.. read moreI'm sorry for your loss. But I'm glad you like it, and I enjoyed hearing your take on it. Thanks for the review! :)
I recently lost a family member, very connectable feeling.
I like this poem a lot, there is a heaviness in the words, the spacing, the alignment.
"the dust which dulled fabrics" brings the realization that it has been some time that this has happened, yet the inability to accept it is present.
Following by "Is cleared away" gives me the implication that the world has seemed to move on but you haven't, the ghost hasn't, the spirit hasn't.
Using the words "space" and "gravity" together gives me the picture of a universe. Instead of just being along in a room or a house, it feels as if you are alone in the universe.
And to state the obvious, the repetition of "i know you are gone" ties this poem together nicely. Good job.
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
This comment has been deleted by the poster.
11 Years Ago
I'm sorry for your loss. But I'm glad you like it, and I enjoyed hearing your take on it. Thanks for.. read moreI'm sorry for your loss. But I'm glad you like it, and I enjoyed hearing your take on it. Thanks for the review! :)
Poetry is the ultimate expression of humanity. It is the only tool we have to express the depth of our emotions and suffering. As for my own, I see the dark side of life and find it beautiful. I seek .. more..