I want to tear the heart out of my chest Crush it to a hard stone, barricade my ribcage ---Never bleed again---
I want to be an empty automaton Live without pain, threshold raised to infinity ---Never laugh again---
I want to shed this living, breathing shell Stop this beating, heart decayed to worm filth ---Never hurt again---
I want to break away without running away Blind the eyes to white, wash the memories
---Never love again---
This small death is something I have to do For these feelings would choke the life out of me--- I shall look at these scars as faded memories Without meaning any longer, a faceless shadow---
No longer shall this anchor stop the body-ship from sailing free And there are so many more empty skies to see.
If you review others' writing you can get more reviews on your own. Just some heads up! You writing reminds me of when i started writing, so I can relate. I really love the last two lines, but they seem different from the rest of the piece. Good write overall.
Pale Rose, (Almost called you CynFall!) what I like about your writing is how you can write as if only to your self. Your work reads like a personal dissection. Yet, somehow, it is never really about you. I never feel lost in your thoughts. I feel like I'm shown mine. You write beautiful poetry. It looks beautiful, too!
In my opinion, there is no better kind of poetry.
Posted 13 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
Thank you so much! I feel the same way, and it's high praise for you to say my poetry embodies this.
If you review others' writing you can get more reviews on your own. Just some heads up! You writing reminds me of when i started writing, so I can relate. I really love the last two lines, but they seem different from the rest of the piece. Good write overall.
Poetry is the ultimate expression of humanity. It is the only tool we have to express the depth of our emotions and suffering. As for my own, I see the dark side of life and find it beautiful. I seek .. more..