Mine tiny line
A Poem by
Pale Rose
Mine tiny line,
Has a shine,
And straight align.
Mine tiny line,
As red as wine:
A salient sign.
Mine tiny line,
Will entwine
Like a vine.
Mine tiny line
Will not resign,
Will not decline;
It’s a shrine
To pain divine.
Never thine:
It is mine--
Mine tiny line.
© 2011 Pale Rose
Author's Note
Very simple, but very carefully crafted. I hope you think so too.
Reviews
I like this. So simple but beautiful. Ambiguous.
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Mine-
could it perhaps be replaced with my?
I can't help thinking this entire piece could make so much more since if it was...
Posted 13 Years Ago
Mine-
could it perhaps be replaced with my?
I can't help thinking this entire piece could make so much more since if it was...
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Is this about cutting? If its not, don't be insulted! this is a really good poem!
Posted 15 Years Ago
Is this about cutting? If its not, don't be insulted! this is a really good poem!
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Very good choice of ryhming words. It is simple but crafty and I must say - Job well done!!
Posted 15 Years Ago
Very good choice of ryhming words. It is simple but crafty and I must say - Job well done!!
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Yeah, I can tell. I like it.
Posted 15 Years Ago
Yeah, I can tell. I like it.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Stats
523 Views
5 Reviews
Shelved in 1 Library
Added on November 27, 2008
Last Updated on February 28, 2011
Tags:
self-harm ,
scars ,
dark poetry
Previous Versions
Author
Pale Rose
About
Poetry is the ultimate expression of humanity. It is the only tool we have to express the depth of our emotions and suffering. As for my own, I see the dark side of life and find it beautiful. I seek ..
more..
Writing