Goodbye eternity

Goodbye eternity.

Proudly fade,

Never taking breath,

Or feeling sunlight,

Seeing the stars,

Or knowing pain.

If you could speak,

I know you would thank me,

For keeping you away,

From this misguided world,

Which rejects those like us--

Rations for feelings,

Lighter with knowledge--

What kind of a life is hate,

With our savagery and guts,

Guiding our lives like facts?

So I said goodbye.

You silently float down,

Into forever,

Into nothing.

Author's Note

I'm always accepting of feedback. I would like to improve my poetry, or it's just nice to know someone resonated with what I wrote.

Reviews

[Ace Jaxon]

I think this is the story of someone's heart, I think if you can do that, then you can do great things. Good job and please continue writing.

[Taino]

I love the visualization as it refers to eternity. The
end, ..." into forever, into nothing" had me reading it again. Please keep writing and creating.