Sasha's Quest For Fire

So let's say I write a story about a girl.
She laughs, she cries and she twirls.
Along came a spider and ate her up.
But for the spider it's a grand shock.

See, this girl has a secret
That she locks under a peach tree.
And you might say, "I know what you're thinking."
But really, It's nothing I can see.

So this girl tells this spider,
"Dear Friend, can I borrow a lighter?"
And the spider, it hides her,
A smirk and it ties her.

There are gates up ahead.
The entrance to the only town that is left.
So the girl speaks, "Spider, there could be a lighter.
Stop, please, I just need a little fire!"

The spider goes on by without hearing a word.
And the little girl grows weary and cold.
She shrivels up like a raisin,
Dies in the empty pit of the spider's basin.

The spider never learned her secret.
And the little girl never found fire for her peach tree.

Reviews

[Jade]

So this girl tells this spider,
"Dear Friend, can I borrow a lighter?"
And the spider, it hides her,
A smirk and it ties her.

I love this part, This is so good, I enjoyed this write

[Selena Jade]

Wow. I really like this. Sort of like the Spider and the Fly. Well done!

[Max Hernz]

The Spider and the Fly? I am not aware of that...

[Selena Jade]

It's a fable that I was told as a child. It has a spider in it and your poem kind of reminded me of it.

[Max Hernz]

Oh. I'm glad I took you back to your childhood. I will look into this Spider and Fly deal. =]