Sigh... The incredible amount of grammar, spelling, formatting, structure and narrative mistakes is ridiculous. I can't take the poem seriously when it looks like you've typed it with your eyes closed and up-side-down. Fix your mistakes (start with capitalisation). It's unfair that you pump out 'poems' several times a day and get loads of praise for it, and then others like myself spend days working on one piece of writing and don't get any reviews, let alone praise.
This, I'm sorry to say, is an extremely shoddy and lacklustre attempt. Where's your structure? Why is there no consistency? Why haven't you even bothered reading it through once? And why on Earth is it being praised so much?
5 for effort, 20 for the execution. Next time, if you can't be bothered to check it, don't publish it.
Sigh... The incredible amount of grammar, spelling, formatting, structure and narrative mistakes is ridiculous. I can't take the poem seriously when it looks like you've typed it with your eyes closed and up-side-down. Fix your mistakes (start with capitalisation). It's unfair that you pump out 'poems' several times a day and get loads of praise for it, and then others like myself spend days working on one piece of writing and don't get any reviews, let alone praise.
This, I'm sorry to say, is an extremely shoddy and lacklustre attempt. Where's your structure? Why is there no consistency? Why haven't you even bothered reading it through once? And why on Earth is it being praised so much?
5 for effort, 20 for the execution. Next time, if you can't be bothered to check it, don't publish it.
Quotes? It's asks, not askes, and I'm not sure why you said "he picks up the pill empty pill bottle." Is he picking up a pill or a pill bottle? Otherwise, very nice :)
Besides being tragic and depressing, your poem has stark imagery and deep emotion. It's easy to read and the lines are simple, which is good for my simple mind. Also, the bright red font exacerbates the sadness. You do have a vivid imagination. I hope it's just your imagination and not reality!