The Red Rose

The Red Rose

 

As it is set to rest on a container so sad,

A young kid lies frozen in a life you wish you never had.

He wishes he could see it; just touch it one last time,

Before he left he said he was sorry for committing his crime.

He didn’t mean to talk back to his dad,

He never knew he would get so mad.

He should have known better; he was abused everyday,

Yet what made me wonder is why he never ran away.

His lasts words were daddy I love you ,

Yet daddy still shot him and said I wished I’d love you to.

He watched his son wounded and take all the pain,

Then he threw the kid out in the rain.

He told him to go burn in hell,

The kid said daddy I will if it will make you well.

As the kid laid in the water he saw a red rose.

He told his dad to put it in his container before it shall close.

I will remember you daddy for all eternity,

Now he’s in heaven hearing the angel’s sweet melody.

 

 

Written By:

Tina Odisho

Reviews

[Legion]

:( Beautifully sad. Well done. If you get a chance, check out my song "The Whip". It has to do with child abuse as well.

[Jazlean]

like fate i just went through my reveiws to find my reveiw of your peom "the unforgettable bullet" that i wrote 4 months ago so i could thank you for the phrase 'unpoppable bubble"...then I go back and there you have just posted a new peom...so I had to read it, and it is beautiful...
I like how this peom takes full circle starting and ending with the rose...Child abuse is so horrid and this came to full light in this poem but symbolically beautiful and it now wants me picking a rose for those children who have had to suffer...
great write. well done!
~Jazlean

[Korthis]

Very strong. The passion is indeed present. This poem made me sad. Good job on the communication to your audience. :)