Orbits Twinned

In bleakness became my being in space,
Its darkness bare, its parallels so blind,
Staggering lonely, in time’s striking race,
Dimensions unending, expanded find,
A place whirled round centred, for cored this soul,
Infinity beckoned, cosmos declared,
A spirit in kind, escaped her past whole,
Gravity pulled, these twinned orbits now shared.
The law of attraction, beguiled life’s force,
Paired light replaced blackness, repelled gaunt pain,
Austerity fled as pleasures recourse,
Our galaxy brightened in binary twain.
Creation enchanted our love’s final match,
Eternal in marriage, entwined we attach.  

Author's Note

Link To Prompt Text: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Law_of_Attraction
Link To Prompt Picture: http://leon7929.deviantart.com/
Law Of Attraction - Poem With Confident Distinction

"The greatest gift that you could ever give to another is your own happiness,
for when you are in a state of joy, happiness, or appreciation,
you are fully connected to the stream of pure,
positive source energy that is truly who you are.
And when you are in that state of connection,
anything or anyone that you are holding
as your object of attention benefits from your attention."
~Esther Hicks~

Reviews

[Zoe Jay]

I like the flow of the poem, it works well as one passage, with short sections but very few full stops. The rhythm is nice and it is pleasant to read. The symmetry of the poem reflects the symmetry of the twin orbits being described. it all flows together, leaving the reader not with one description or phrase ringing in mind, but rather a sort of melded impression, a sense of space and movement... the degree of vagueness is perfect, it gives the poem a dreamy feel, and the descriptions enter via the subconscious. There's not much content or focus, but it works well as an ethereal, descriptive, kind of ambient poem, nice write. :)

[Nocturna]

As touching and beautifully expressed as always ...
xx
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[annie minus]

Beautiful! I love the switch between emptiness and finding love, the galaxy metaphor is brilliant. Great the quote in the AN too, your poem accompanies it perfectly.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Creation enchanted our love’s final match, eternal in marriage, entwined we attach, now this is my kind of poem..a match made in the heavens.....wonderfully written!

[Daytonight]

The last two lines are my favorite part. Hopeless romantic that I am! Lol! Great rhyme and flow. Beautifully done. Keep on penning.

[Robert E Cano II]

There's something stunning about the cosmos and the night sky from our distant views. What I love about this piece, aside from the depth of it, was the magnificent imagery that literally brought the cosmos to my fingertips, where I could touch, taste, and see up close all that makes it so breathtaking. The beauty of love is finding that special someone to "specialize" in. A wonderful Shakespearean sonnet, my friend.

[L]

Lot to like in this piece. It looks like a Shakespearean Sonnet- am I right? But without the iambic pentameter? So I'm guessing a modern take on a Sh Sonnet? Nice piece

[John Faulkner]

Very beautiful..The ultimate perfection of love


JOHN